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The list was promoted by PresN via FACBot (talk) 00:26, 29 January 2022 (UTC) [1].[reply]

List of accolades received by Black (2005 film) edit

List of accolades received by Black (2005 film) (edit | talk | history | protect | delete | links | watch | logs | views)

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Nominator(s): —Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 02:36, 27 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I am nominating it because I believe this list is comprehensive enough. —Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 02:36, 27 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Comments
  • "at the sets built by Omung Kumar" => "on sets built by Omung Kumar"
  • "The film was opened on 4 February 2005" => "The film opened on 4 February 2005"
  • "with the total grossing" => "with a total gross"
  • "The film received eleven awards that include those" => "The film received eleven awards, including those"
  • Ravi K. Chandran should sort under C not K - the K is not part of his surname
  • Think that's it from me :-) -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 07:26, 27 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Done. —Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 07:42, 27 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Accessibility review (MOS:DTAB) edit

  • Tables need captions, which allow screen reader software to jump straight to named tables without having to read out all of the text before it each time. Visual captions can be added by putting |+ caption_text as the first line of the table code; if that caption would duplicate a nearby section header, you can make it screen-reader-only by putting |+ {{sronly|caption_text}} instead. --PresN 18:54, 28 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Done. —Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 05:39, 29 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by RunningTiger123 edit

Overall, much of the language in the lead is unnecessarily wordy:

  • "Bhansali, who wrote the story, co-produced Black under SLB Films with Anshuman Swami of Applause Entertainment, as well as writing the screenplay with Bhavani Iyer and Prakash Kapadia." → "Bhansali co-produced Black under SLB Films with Anshuman Swami of Applause Entertainment and co-wrote the screenplay with Bhavani Iyer and Prakash Kapadia." (allows verb tenses to agree and removes redundant information)
    • Correction: Just realized that the story and screenplay credits are different, so try: "Bhansali, who wrote the story, co-produced Black under SLB Films with Anshuman Swami of Applause Entertainment and co-wrote the screenplay with Bhavani Iyer and Prakash Kapadia." RunningTiger123 (talk) 17:40, 5 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "the editing was finished by Bela Sehgal" is a weird phrase (she didn't just finish the editing, she did all of the editing). Consider something like "Bela Sehgal edited the film" or "the editing was done by Bela Sehgal".
  • "production cost of" → "production budget"
  • "In the International Indian Film Academy Awards' seventh iteration" → "At the 7th International Indian Film Academy Awards" (corrects preposition and removes poor synonym ["iteration"])

Other notes:

  • External link should use www.imdb.com, not m.imdb.com
  • When you use multiple sources (especially 3 or more), I would consider either combining them into a single ref tag or placing some of them next to each other horizontally. This is because when the table is sorted, cells spanning multiple rows are split, resulting in individual rows that are unnecessarily tall due to excessive footnotes, limiting the amount of text that can be displayed on screen at one time. (For example, when the table is sorted, the cells for the International Indian Film Academy Awards each become 5 lines of text tall solely because of the footnotes.) Let me know if I need to clarify this more or if you have questions.
  • Footnote a should be converted to a complete sentence (by writing "The date..." instead of "Date..."), or its period needs to be removed.

— RunningTiger123 (talk) 17:38, 5 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Done. —Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 02:48, 6 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Support – RunningTiger123 (talk) 17:42, 6 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Comments Support by Gerald Waldo Luis edit

Resolved comments from GeraldWL 01:11, 24 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
* Has this article been written in Indian English? Just wanna make sure, since I'm not an expert in Indian English.
  • "The film narrates the story of"-- in film terminology, narrate refers to a voiceover. I think what you're trying to say is "The film tells the story of".
  • Suggest linking ₹ and US$
  • The image caption shouldn't have full stop as it's not a full sentence.
  • "The film won 67 awards out of 84 nominations"-- this suggests that the 67 wins are part of the 84 nominations, when they're actually separate. Change to "The film won 67 awards and 84 nominations"
  • You have some references with multiple citations, which is totally okay, but they're divided in an odd way by having a line. It makes it look kinda messy. Most articles I've reviewed use bullets (*) instead.

That's all I have for this article; the table looks neat. GeraldWL 11:40, 23 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Done. —Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 00:34, 24 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Source review passed; promoting. --PresN 02:42, 28 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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