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The list was promoted by The Rambling Man via FACBot (talk) 00:31, 12 April 2017 (UTC) [1].[reply]

List of Naruto chapters (Part II, volumes 49–72) edit

List of Naruto chapters (Part II, volumes 49–72) (edit | talk | history | protect | delete | links | watch | logs | views)

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Nominator(s): MCMLXXXIX 13:35, 13 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

This list is about the second part of Part II of the manga Naruto. I ask the coordinator if I could have this up, and they approved after it has been two weeks since my first nomination. I hope this can get it's support. MCMLXXXIX 13:35, 13 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

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All references are archived. However, the first citation needs a link to Masashi Kishimoto and a "trans_title" for non-Japanese speakers.Tintor2 (talk) 14:06, 13 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Tintor2: Done MCMLXXXIX 14:19, 13 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Then article passes it.Tintor2 (talk) 14:21, 13 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Comments from Aoba47
  • I would suggesting an image to lead as done in the FL for List of Naruto chapters (Part II, volumes 28–48). Maybe the cover of volume 49 would be suitable? This is more up to your personal preference so feel free to tell me if you prefer not to have an image at the top.
  • Support: Wonderful job with this list! If possible, could you also provide some feedback for my FAC? Aoba47 (talk) 16:06, 13 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Resolved comments from The Rambling Man (talk) 07:58, 30 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Comments
  • "The cover of the forty-nineth volume of the Naruto manga, also the first tankōbon of the second half of the Part II storyline, was released in the United States by Viz Media on October 5, 2010." well, it should be 49th, or forty-ninth, and I assume it wasn't just the cover that was released, need to re-phrase to avoid the ambiguity.
  • Intro sentence is dull as dishwater, tell me what the series is all about before getting into the technicalities of the divisions in chapters and parts etc.
  • "The story.." sentence is too long, split.
  • "sealed within him...." by "him" who do you mean? The last person you mention is Uchicha, I presume you don't mean that?
  • "series began serialization" somewhat tautological. Try rephrasing. The Rambling Man (talk) 15:22, 26 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • "February 15, 2007 on" comma after year please.
  • Naruto Shippuden or Naruto: Shippuden ?
  • "The English serialization" English-language?
  • "Part II, beginning with chapter 245" and the table starts with 454, so it's worth adding in the lead somewhere how many chapters form a volume, or at least have a note that says that as this list deals with volumes 49 to 72, that's chapters 454 to 700.
  • Ref 6 has VIZ not Viz (like all other refs).

The Rambling Man (talk) 15:22, 26 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

  • Not really, I checked the first "resolved" issue, to find the caption now reads "The cover of the forty-nineth volume of the Naruto manga, also the first tankōbon of the second half of the Part II storyline." which still has a typo and is now a fragment so no longer needs a full stop. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:05, 26 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]
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