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The list was promoted by PresN via FACBot (talk) 23:31, 6 March 2017 (UTC) [1].[reply]

List of Blood-C episodes edit

List of Blood-C episodes (edit | talk | history | protect | delete | links | watch | logs | views)

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Nominator(s): ProtoDrake (talk) 00:46, 18 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I am nominating this for featured list because... this article is, I feel, fairly close to becoming a featured list, as all relevant information about the episodes are included in this article and would merely create clutter if merged with another article. It's also not the right structure to be a "GA" or "FA". The one thing that may be in the way of its promotion are the episode synopses, which I will willingly alter and trim during the article's candidacy. ProtoDrake (talk) 00:46, 18 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by User:Tintor2 edit

The article looks good to me but there are somethings that bother me before doing the support:

Comments by User:Aoba47 edit

  • The image needs an ALT description.
  • I would include the exact dates of the show's run in the lead rather than referencing just the months (between July and September 2012).
  • The second and third sentences of the lead's first paragraph seem somewhat awkwardly constructed as they appear more like a list. I would revise this part and vary up the sentence structure a little to avoid making this come across as too stilted.
  • Shouldn't the information about the show come before the directing/writing/production credits and the time of its broadcast? As someone who has never seen or heard of this show, it would be more beneficial to move the last sentence of the lead's first paragraph as the second sentence instead to help with an unfamiliar reader.
  • Right now, there is information about the show's broadcast schedule in both the first and second paragraph of the lead. Ideally, it would better to put this information together to avoid going back and forth between topics and make a more cohesive narrative.
  • You use the word "broadcast" three times in the second paragraph of the lead. Please vary your word choice.
  • While it is interesting information, is the last paragraph of the lead really necessary? It is information about the show, but this list is about the episodes of the show so it is off topic. It feels more appropriate for the main article rather than here, at least to me. I would suggest removing this.
  • @ProtoDrake: Great work with the list. Once my comments are addressed, I will support this nomination. Good luck getting this passed, and congratulations on getting the main article through GAN. Aoba47 (talk) 19:21, 21 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]
@Aoba47: I've done my best to address all the issues you raised. --ProtoDrake (talk) 19:33, 21 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Support: Everything looks good to me. Good luck with this list. If possible, could you look at my FLC as well? Aoba47 (talk) 19:52, 21 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]
DragonZero
  • First episode, first sentence. The third note (Meeting the dog daily) sounds odd grammatically. I could be wrong here.
  • Is there something to link Jizō to? Kshitigarbha?
  • "an Train Elder Bairn" a
  • I think you can do without the emphasis on terms such as guimauve or convenant.
  • Do you mean the train monster is saying he was trying to honor a convenant? Or is he reminding Saya about some convenant. A bit of clarity here.
  • "but he brushes him off." her off?
  • "Saya encounters both the mysterious dog and has a meeting with Shinichirō" I think there's something grammatically wrong here.
  • "Saya begins to experience headaches related to visions and attempts to remember her past, but finds Fumito's coffee soothes her." Clarity
  • "At school the next day due to rain, Nene & Nono Motoe persuade the class to tell ghost stories, leading to Kanako to retell a legend about the Elder Bairns, in which Saya suffers another headache and fains" To improve flow, remove the "due to rain". If Nene and Nono are not a major plot point, consider rewriting to to say the class shares ghost stories leading to...
  • "Saya is later confronted by the dog" Is this also the same dog from the first episode?
  • Injecting Tadayoshi three times is affecting the flow of episode 7. I suggest removing her internal debate about Tadayoshi, leaving only the monster's last words to question the character.
  • "As Shinichirō's attempt to confess his love for Saya is halted by Tadayoshi's arrival, Saya questions why she does not know her mother's name. " Awkward writing
  • This would probably be the hardest to fix, but I think episode 12 should be written at a more overall view. Something like "Saya battles the xxx as her friends die one by one, leading to confrontation with yyy" I don't understand the yyy guy's motive though.
  • Remove leading zeros and I suggest applying Mos Cap to the reference titles.

I'm not checking the references one by one but they are from reliable sources. You'll have my support after addressing the issues. DragonZero (Talk · Contribs) 06:43, 1 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@DragonZero: I've done my best to address all the issues you raised. The only thing I can't figure out is "leading zeros". Do you mean the letter "O" in the first episode? Because that's what the episode is called. --ProtoDrake (talk) 09:46, 1 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]
@ProtoDrake: Probably refers to the episode numbering - the episodes are numbered 01, 02, etc rather than 1, 2...--IDVtalk 10:11, 1 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Ah, thanks. Sorted. --ProtoDrake (talk) 10:49, 1 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]
" Fumito shots Saya" Shoots. Support DragonZero (Talk · Contribs) 21:14, 1 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Source Review: Not seeing any formatting problems, and spotchecks reveal no issues, either. Passing source review and promoting. --PresN 21:39, 6 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

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