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Josephine Butler bibliography edit

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Nominator(s): SchroCat (talk) 19:46, 18 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Josephine Butler is a fascinating and important character in the history of women's rights. A tireless and forceful feminist and social reformer, she campaigned for women's suffrage, the right to better education, the end of coverture in British law, the end of child prostitution and against the human trafficking of young women and children into European prostitution. Her biggest victory was against the Contagious Diseases Acts, a discriminatory law that enforced medical examination on any woman accused of being a prostitute (without any evidence being needed); she described the examination as surgical or steel rape. This is a new list (Butler's biography is at PR at the moment); any and all constructive comments are welcome. – SchroCat (talk) 19:46, 18 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Comment from Cassianto
  • There is a lot of use of the word "biographer/biography" in the last para of the lede. Everything else looks great. CassiantoTalk 15:10, 4 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • Cheers Cass: tweaked a few of them out - how does it look now? - Gavin (talk) 21:12, 4 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Comments from Montanabw
  • Given SNUGGUMS's comment about too many, I've removed it altogether. - Gavin (talk) 08:35, 5 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • All other images appear to be fine.
  • Citations check out
  • Mathers does not appear to be used in the footnotes, except in a double footnote at 3 -- are both sources required there to verify the material?
  • Two parts to the sentence, with a source for each part. – Gavin (talk) 08:35, 5 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • I do note that paragraph one of the lead has the first several sentences sourced to two sources placed at the second-to-last sentence. Is it possible to parse out which parts of that paragraph are attributable to which source, or are they so intertwined in each sentence that this is not possible?
  • I could possibly break out some of the parts into separate bits, but we'd be left with "five words[Ref1] six words[Ref2] ten words words[Ref1] seven words[Ref2] five words[Ref1][Ref2]", which would jar a little. The 'big picture' leads of peoples lives are great in articles (where the refs are in the body), but to break them down into chunks in a list means either too many duplicated refs, or combining them at the end of a para. - Gavin (talk) 08:35, 5 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
    • It's a Catch-22, for sure... I've done it both ways. Where they really are merged, I can live with your decision there; beats "Allsortsof stuff from one source [Ref1] and Allsortsofstuff from the other source.[Ref2]" Montanabw(talk) 07:17, 6 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • Not sure I care for the quote box sandwiched in with the images running along the side of the charts; it may be more suitable for the lead section, either under the main image or left-justified a bit below. That or put it at the top or bottom. As it sits, it appears out of context, as different width screens place it in varying proximity with the entries on the list.
  • I've moved the quote into the caption; at least it'll ensure any less-than-welcome attention from my stalkers about the use of a QB. (Although I'm sure they'll find something else to complain about....) - Gavin (talk) 08:35, 5 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • I use quote boxes all the time, not an issue for me. Montanabw(talk) 07:17, 6 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

All for now. Montanabw(talk) 22:09, 4 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

  • Many thanks Montana. Cheers - Gavin (talk) 08:35, 5 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Resolved comments from SNUGGUMS
  • Maiden name is probably better for her bio page
  • Occupations tend not to be linked in opening sentence, so I'd unlink accordingly
  • I think that's more common for articles rather than lists? As this is the only mention of the terms in the text (i.e. we can't link them in the body), I think they are best left in place? Does that sound reasonable? - Gavin (talk) 08:35, 5 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The death of her daughter in 1864"..... let's include a name, which especially helps for those unfamiliar with Butler's life
  • "detailing the life of her father"..... same as before
    • I see a contradiction here: You advise to omit Butler's maiden name, presumably on the grounds of irrelevance, but ask for the full names of her daughter and father to help the reader understand about her life? How does using the full names of these people help us to understand Butler's bibliography? Surely this can also be left for her biography? If this was me I'd omit the whole lot. CassiantoTalk 07:02, 5 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
    • I'll wait for SNUGGUMS's response on this, but I'll add that I've removed the maiden name for the time being - I'm not sure it adds anything to this particular page. - Gavin (talk) 08:35, 5 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
      • I was talking about first name for daughter as simply saying "her daughter" isn't very informative with no previous identification. Same reason for her father, although last name in that instance is helpful to include as it differs from the subject's common name. Snuggums (talk / edits) 13:38, 5 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • For File:George Butler with hat.jpg, a caption like "Butler wrote a biography of her husband George after his death" would have better flow
  • Three pics of Butler (four if counting the bust) is a bit much here; you just need one or maybe two
    • I've removed the painting, which leaves us with three, each in a separate section (and each in a separate artistic medium too). Does that look better? - Gavin (talk) 08:35, 5 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

This shouldn't take too long to fix up. Snuggums (talk / edits) 06:04, 5 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

  • Many thanks SNUGGUMS: all now sorted, with the point about the names to be answered. Cheers for your thoughts - Gavin (talk) 08:35, 5 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I now support following the improvements made. Snuggums (talk / edits) 14:26, 5 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

  • That's great: many thanks indeed. Cheers - Gavin (talk) 14:28, 5 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Support Lovely looking list, which certainly looks to meet all of the criteria.♦ Dr. Blofeld 09:57, 5 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Comments - since I'm persona not grata, or will be by Christmas, I feel duty bound to spend some of my final days antagonising the outgoing FLC delegate with as many nit-picky comments as I can muster in the few moments I have between changing nappies (not mine, you understand). SO, stand by for a right old rollocking.

  • You link "feminism" but not "women's rights". I would put them on a par so perhaps both or neither.
  • " The death of her daughter Eva..." presumably since this pushed her on to campaigning, her death had something to do with the movements she advocated, could you expand in a sentence or two for context?
  • "surgical or steel rape" should that be in quote marks?
  • Again, a linky thing, if you feel inclined to link prostitute, I would urge you to consider linking monograph, the latter being far less common in my life than the former.
  • "thought was probably" thought or actually wrote?
  • "Over a period of 40 years Butler wrote 90 books and pamphlets, " we had this conversation at DYK. I think this needs to be softened, e.g. at least 40 years, more than 90...?
  • "Butler wrote a biography of her husband George after his death.[3]" would suggest (pictured) after George.
  • "Bust of Butler in 1865, aged 36, by Alexander Munro" she was born in 1828, so where's the ref for her being "aged 36" and not "aged 37"?
  • How can year of first publication for a monthly publication be "1898–1900"? Surely it's just 1898?

And that is all. May you always have a pot to piss in. My utmost regards to your sterling work and your good humour and your magnificent assistance in helping me create 157 good articles in just a few days over one year, more good work in two days than most "Wikipedians" put into their entire "career" here. Don't be a stranger. The Rambling Man (talk) 18:49, 6 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

  • Cheers TRM: all tweaked and re-worked per your suggestions. Thanks also for your very kind words: much appreciated. Cheers - Gavin (talk) 13:33, 8 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Resolved comments from Cowlibob (talk) 20:38, 16 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
*It was a bit unclear why her daughter's death led her to campaigning? Was the death a result of poor working conditions and safety? Presumably her personal loss led her to focus on lifting others from suffering.
  • "Another historian, Judith Walkowitz, considers the work provided Butler with a "historical justification for her own political activism"" perhaps should be "considers the work as providing Butler..."
  • In the caption, I don't think we need the "she" as her name is already mentioned.
  • I note some of the pamphlets have French titles, were these translations or did she write them in French as well? Might be interesting to mention that she was published in France and Switzerland as well as the U.K. and in a different language if that's the case. Cowlibob (talk) 11:43, 11 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • Many thanks Cowlibob, all tweaked per your suggestions. Cheers – Gavin (talk) 12:09, 11 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Not much I could do on the source review, but passing. So, sadly, promoting this list. Don't go, SchroCat! --PresN 21:48, 21 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

  • Thanks PresN – it's been great working with you, but the enjoyment has been ground out of me over time, I'm afraid. I'm leaving while I'm just about still ahead of the trolls and stalkers! Cheers – Gavin (talk) 22:57, 21 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
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