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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was promoted by Ian Rose via FACBot (talk) 15:40, 19 December 2015 [1].

William Sterling Parsons edit

Nominator(s): Hawkeye7 (talk) 23:02, 16 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]

This article is about Deak Parsons, the Naval officer who was the deputy head of the wartime Los Alamos Laboratory, and the commander of the mission that bombed Hiroshima. Hawkeye7 (talk) 23:02, 16 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Image review

  • File:MK53_fuze.jpg: source link is dead and image is tagged as lacking author. Nikkimaria (talk) 03:52, 17 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]
    Added link to the archive of the source. Hawkeye7 (talk) 00:17, 6 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Support on prose per standard disclaimer. These are my edits. - Dank (push to talk) 13:03, 19 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Question from John Why the hard-coded image sizes? Per WP:IMGSIZE we would generally allow readers to set their own display sizes and use the "upright" parameter to enlarge particularly important ones. --John (talk) 20:42, 19 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]

At the time it was written, WMF was demanding fixed widths to make the Visual Editor's life easier. They later relented, but the article was not changed. I have removed the hard-coded sizes. Hawkeye7 (talk) 19:36, 6 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Support Comments

  • an American Naval officer Why is naval capitalized?
    Shouln't be. Decapped. Hawkeye7 (talk) 00:40, 24 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • Link weaponeer, flagship
    The second is done. We don't have a weaponeer article. Hawkeye7 (talk) 00:40, 24 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • The bit about being the weaponeer on the Enola Gay is repeated twice in the lede.
    Re-worded. Hawkeye7 (talk) 00:40, 24 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • Convert each measurement on first use.
    Should be. Did I miss anything? Hawkeye7 (talk) 00:40, 24 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]
    Sorry, I forgot to watchlist this. 5"/38, 3-inch AA gun, 1,500 tons. Switching to support in anticipation of this being done.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 05:24, 12 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • Tell the reader what type of ship each ship is on first mention.
    Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 00:40, 24 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • Why should the reader care who his secretary was? Or that bit about Newkirk. Just because information is available, doesn't mean that it should be used.
    It was to illustrate the way he had naval personnel posted to Los Alamos. Deleted. Hawkeye7 (talk) 00:40, 24 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • Otherwise, nicely done.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 23:06, 22 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Sources review

  • In the References, locations should be formatted consistently (compare "New York, New York" and "New York")
  • I suggest you pipelink University Park, as otherwise the location mayn not be clear
  • If you're adding the state to New York, you should add one for Boston

Otherwise, references look of appropriate quality and reliability, and are consistently and correctly formatted. Brianboulton (talk) 18:35, 1 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for your review. I've added states to all the locations in the references for consistency. I haven't piped any. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:46, 1 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Support. Just one query.

  • "During the flight to Hiroshima, Parsons climbed into the bomb bay to load the powder charge, to avoid the possibility of a nuclear explosion if the aircraft crashed and burned on takeoff." I found this confusing at first as he seemed to be preventing after the event. Maybe "to avoid the possibility of a nuclear explosion if the aircraft had crashed on takeoff with a loaded bomb on board".
    Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 17:54, 14 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • A first rate article. Dudley Miles (talk) 17:34, 14 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]
    THanks for your review. Hawkeye7 (talk) 17:54, 14 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]
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