Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Shine (Gwen Stefani song)/archive1

The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was withdrawn.

Shine (Gwen Stefani song) edit

Nominator(s): Aoba47 (talk) 03:14, 11 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

This article is about... a song recorded by American singer Gwen Stefani and featuring vocals by Pharrell Williams for the 2014 film Paddington. It has recently gone through the GA review and passed and I believe it has all the qualities for a FA. Thank you in advance for your comments and suggestions. Aoba47 (talk) 03:14, 11 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Who is Pharrell Williams? - provide context to the uninformed reader.

Done

Too many instances with the word "song" in the lead and the article body.

Done Replaced a few instances; let me know if more needs to replaced.

"Stefani later praised the song's lyrics" - how so? what changed her mind, just the viewing of the film? If so, which particular scene?

According to the sources, she changed her mind just by the viewing of the film with her children. She did not pick out a particular scene when talking about it. Aoba47 (talk) 05:00, 26 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Did she like the lyrics or just the song in general? According to the article body, she liked the song after viewing the film, whereas the lead says she changed her minds on the lyrics. – jona ✉ 23:21, 26 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

She said her opinion about the lyrics changed after watching the film. I made the correction in the article. Aoba47 (talk) 03:07, 27 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

When was "Happy" and "Spark the Fire" released?

Done I originally had the dates next to all the songs, but I was advised to removed them during the GAN as the reviewer called them "filler".

Since we don't have an article on Herbert Chappell, can you explain who he is/was?

Done

Who are The Cranberries?

Done

There is a difference between reggae and reggae pop.

Done Thank you for this catch! I can't believe I overlooked something as obvious as this ><

– jona ✉ 00:37, 26 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for your comments! Let me know if there is anything else that needs to be improved. Aoba47 (talk) 05:00, 26 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

The infobox says reggae pop but the lead says reggae.

Done

Herbert is a composer, got it but what's his nationality? Which era of music was he in?

Done Let me know if this part needs to be clarified more. Aoba47 (talk) 02:28, 27 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Still too many instances with the word "song" in the article body (try track, it, recording, etc).

Done Thank you for the suggestion; I couldn't think of alternatives for some reason. Aoba47 (talk) 02:28, 27 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

A source is needed for Herbert's claim. – jona ✉ 02:50, 27 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I added a source clarifying that Herbert created a theme for Paddington Bear. The Boston Herald source has the citation for the information on the Cambridge Symphony Orcestra Family Concerts. Aoba47 (talk) 03:31, 27 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

– jona ✉ 23:21, 26 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you again for your help. Let me know if there is anything else that needs to be improved. Aoba47 (talk) 02:28, 27 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I now support this article after the comments I made were addressed. Best, – jona ✉ 14:45, 27 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you again for your help. Aoba47 (talk) 17:26, 27 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose - The prose is not of FA standard and the article needs copyediting throughout. I am not going to list all the problems, because this is FAC and not peer review, except for one: "but some criticized the it for being weaker". Graham Beards (talk) 20:49, 27 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Graham Beards: Thank you for your comment. I have revised the part you have pointed out, but I honestly can't see any other errors in the prose. Just for your knowledge was c/e by the GOCE, but I will submit it for peer review if this fails. Aoba47 (talk) 21:03, 27 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I would like to withdraw this nomination. I have put this article up for peer review to improve it to the FA standard if possible. I would like to thank both of the people who commented. Aoba47 (talk) 19:56, 29 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Closing note: This candidate has been withdrawn, but there may be a delay in bot processing of the close. Please see WP:FAC/ar, and leave the {{featured article candidates}} template in place on the talk page until the bot goes through. Ian Rose (talk) 00:56, 30 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

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