Conflict of interest edit

  Hello, Adam.toulson. We welcome your contributions, but if you have an external relationship with the people, places or things you have written about on the page Draft:Stephen Toulson & Sons, you may have a conflict of interest (COI). Editors with a conflict of interest may be unduly influenced by their connection to the topic. See the conflict of interest guideline and FAQ for organizations for more information. We ask that you:

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Also, editing for the purpose of advertising, publicising, or promoting anyone or anything is not permitted. Thank you.  Velella  Velella Talk   22:17, 14 November 2023 (UTC)Reply

Hi Velella,
Many thanks for your comment and help.
Disclosure: the founder of the business was my great great grandfather.
However, I read the conflict of interest terms carefully before I started to draft the article. I am not in any way, nor ever have been, associated with the company Stephen Toulson & Sons (the business was bought out long before I was born). This is not promotional, the business is no more (since 1974!) and there is no possible financial or other gain, other than sharing notable history.
I do have significant background in the subject matter and history of the Yorkshire and North Lincolnshire area. I believe I have researched the topic thoroughly, presented the information with recognised sources (these are coming) and sought a balanced and unbiased view from a variety of sources. I therefore believe my draft article is compliant with Wikipedia's policies.
Nevertheless, I do intend to open this up for discussion along with my sources before I submit for publication. In addition, I appreciate any further input from more knowledgeable editors about how I can avoid COI.
Thanks and best, Adam Adam.toulson (talk) 22:33, 14 November 2023 (UTC)Reply

Your submission at Articles for creation: Stephen Toulson & Sons (November 16) edit

 
Your recent article submission to Articles for Creation has been reviewed. Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reason left by Vanderwaalforces was: Please check the submission for any additional comments left by the reviewer. You are encouraged to edit the submission to address the issues raised and resubmit after they have been resolved.
Vanderwaalforces (talk) 10:21, 16 November 2023 (UTC)Reply
 
Hello, Adam.toulson! Having an article draft declined at Articles for Creation can be disappointing. If you are wondering why your article submission was declined, please post a question at the Articles for creation help desk. If you have any other questions about your editing experience, we'd love to help you at the Teahouse, a friendly space on Wikipedia where experienced editors lend a hand to help new editors like yourself! See you there! Vanderwaalforces (talk) 10:21, 16 November 2023 (UTC)Reply
Thank you @Vanderwaalforces! I really appreciate you taking the time to review my first article. The references were one of my concerns and I'd tried to submit detailed newspaper articles rather than passing mentions. I'd appreciate any ideas about what references I might include for a historic company in order to meet the criteria. To my knowledge, there have been no books published. Perhaps that means it doesn't meet the criteria? That would be a shame, as I think a business that employed more than 150 people (in the 1960s!) reshaped and quarried thousands of acres of land and contributed to some of the region's biggest infrastructure projects is surely notable. I'll drop a post in Teahouse and I also intend to seek help from the Sheffield Wikiproject - any other advice you can offer would be highly valued. Thanks again! Adam Adam.toulson (talk) 05:37, 17 November 2023 (UTC)Reply
Hi @Vanderwaalforces, I have now added some further more more significant sources, including;
1. Yorkshire Post article "Engineering in the North of England". 21 January 1937. pp. 20–21 describing the company as a major supplier of construction materials in the region and supporting a number of facts outlined in the article.
2. The Concrete Year Book. Concrete Publications. 1934. Although this is another passing reference (as with all similar publications), it is significant that ST&S appeared in the annual publication from 1934 to 1974.
3. Sources of Road Aggregate in Great Britain. H.M. Stationary 1st Edition. 1951. Again, ST&S is mentioned in all four editions.
I am trying to get some further advice to check that these sources better meet the criteria before resubmitting. Any further advice greatly appreciated. Thanks! Adam.toulson (talk) 15:32, 19 November 2023 (UTC)Reply
Hi there. Your draft still contains heavily loaded promotional words. Please neutralise the draft. Vanderwaalforces (talk) 21:05, 19 November 2023 (UTC)Reply
Thanks @Vanderwaalforces. I've removed anything that I think might be interpreted as promotional and neutralised the draft. I think all facts now have a citation. Please let me know if there are any specifics I've missed. Appreciate your help. Adam.toulson (talk) 22:11, 19 November 2023 (UTC)Reply
The intention of my edits is to make it more likely for a reviewer to acccept the draft. David notMD (talk) 02:18, 21 November 2023 (UTC)Reply
@David notMD, some of the feedback has been a little intangible and so I've found it very useful when more experienced editors have made changes directly and documented reasoning. Good for the article and my learning. Many thanks indeed for your help. Adam.toulson (talk) 07:26, 21 November 2023 (UTC)Reply

Your submission at Articles for creation: Stephen Toulson & Sons has been accepted edit

 
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~WikiOriginal-9~ (talk) 07:38, 21 November 2023 (UTC)Reply
That's amazing @WikiOriginal-9, many thanks indeed! Adam.toulson (talk) 13:00, 21 November 2023 (UTC)Reply
Congratulations. I removed the orphan tag because you added a Wikilink from Amey. David notMD (talk) 15:09, 21 November 2023 (UTC)Reply
-) Thanks so much for your help @David notMD! Adam.toulson (talk) 15:23, 21 November 2023 (UTC)Reply
Delighted to see this published. -- Verbarson  talkedits 22:46, 22 November 2023 (UTC)Reply
Many thanks indeed for your guidance @Verbarson! Adam.toulson (talk) 06:18, 23 November 2023 (UTC)Reply