- The following discussion is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Orlady (talk) 02:27, 8 August 2012 (UTC)
John Dabiri edit
- ... that John Dabiri designed and constructed a wind farm based on the optimal vortex formation of schooling fish?
- ... that John Dabiri, the son of Nigerian immigrants, designed and completed a wind farm based on the optimal vortex formation of schooling fish?
- Comment: Self-nominated, first nomination
Created/expanded by Mathwhiz 29 (talk). Self nom at 17:39, 27 July 2012 (UTC)
I like your article very much, fascinating person and topic, good structure, many good sources. I wonder if you want to add to the hook "the son of Nigerian immigrants"? Please go over the prose once more for some details, "other honors" after a sentence that doesn't mention honors, date the "recently" in the lead, avoid the repetition of "encourage", I don't get "His senior thesis was a Morgan W. McKinzie Senior Thesis Prize Finalist with Distinction, and received a grade of A+ with Distinction." (would like to know what it was about, rather than prizes). Do you think you could improve the vortex article? (Not necessary, of course, would just be nice to have an article on the Main page without a tag.) --Gerda Arendt (talk) 20:28, 5 August 2012 (UTC)
- Hello! Thanks :) it's slightly fixed? I don't know much about vortices, so if you want I can work on that article over the weekend. I also don't know how to incorporate his ethnicity without it sounding odd. mathwhiz29 01:23, 7 August 2012 (UTC)
The original hook is fine, I don't think the other is odd and would let the one decide who takes it to prep. If you don't agree, strikeit ;) --Gerda Arendt (talk) 06:45, 7 August 2012 (UTC)
- Hello! Thanks :) it's slightly fixed? I don't know much about vortices, so if you want I can work on that article over the weekend. I also don't know how to incorporate his ethnicity without it sounding odd. mathwhiz29 01:23, 7 August 2012 (UTC)
