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The result was: promoted by BlueMoonset (talk) 20:43, 19 March 2013 (UTC).
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Émile Janssens edit
- ... that Lieutenant-General Émile Janssens is believed to have been personally responsible for causing a mutiny in the Republic of Congo in 1960?
- Reviewed: Victor Maghakian
Created by Brigade Piron (talk). Self nominated at 15:40, 17 March 2013 (UTC).
Created three days ago, length is in excess of 1500 characters, the hook is interesting and sourced, not seeing any serious policy issues with the rest of the article, and the QPQ is done. Perhaps you should consider some slightly better wording for the hook, though. I am a little concerned that the hook is a bit too negative and somewhat misleading. Replacing that statement that he "has been held personally responsible" with something clearer would be preferred before I can feel comfortable approving this nomination.--The Devil's Advocate tlk. cntrb. 04:14, 18 March 2013 (UTC)
- Would you feel more comfortable with removing the distancing? "that...was personally responsible..." for instance?Brigade Piron (talk) 14:03, 18 March 2013 (UTC)
- I think the issue is that the word "held" conveys some sort of official finding. Saying he was responsible is too definitive, though. Something to the effect of "is believed to have been personally responsible" would be more fitting.--The Devil's Advocate tlk. cntrb. 14:08, 18 March 2013 (UTC)
- Alteration made. ---Brigade Piron (talk) 14:15, 18 March 2013 (UTC)
Yep, that will do it.--The Devil's Advocate tlk. cntrb. 17:45, 18 March 2013 (UTC)
