Talk:Typhoon Longwang

Latest comment: 10 years ago by Cyclonebiskit in topic GA Review
Good articleTyphoon Longwang has been listed as one of the Natural sciences good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
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DateProcessResult
July 26, 2013Good article nomineeListed
Did You Know
A fact from this article appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the "Did you know?" column on July 14, 2013.
The text of the entry was: Did you know ... that Typhoon Longwang was the deadliest tropical cyclone to impact China during the 2005 Pacific typhoon season?
On this day...A fact from this article was featured on Wikipedia's Main Page in the "On this day..." column on September 25, 2023.

Todo edit

More impact, fix run-on sentences, fix external links. Jdorje 03:03, 14 January 2006 (UTC)Reply

Holy sources Batman! edit

The almighty source collection begins...

Meteorological history
Taiwan
People's Republic of China
Country reports

Cyclonebiskit (talk) 14:43, 9 July 2013 (UTC)Reply

GA Review edit

This review is transcluded from Talk:Typhoon Longwang/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 05:18, 26 July 2013 (UTC)Reply

  • Not terribly related, but since Typhoon Longwang (disambiguation) only mentions two storms, is there even a need for the dab to exist?
  • "After reaching Category 4-equivalent intensity" - I'd say on what scale
  • You should probably put the note about the sustained just after the 110 mph). I thought it was a note about Taiwan.
  • "Large-scale evacuations took place in mainland China, with 684,860 people relocating." - this should probably be mentioned after you're finished talking about Taiwan. This would imply they're in the same country, and to maintain a neutral point of view, I think you should keep everything Taiwan-related together.
  • "Despite the intensity of the storm, damage was relatively limited." - I would add a "there" somewhere there.
  • "Two people lost their lives, 73 were injured and damage" - add a comma after injured
  • "the JTWC also classified the system as a tropical depression" - here, I would add the JTWC number.
  • "Situated to the southwest of a ridge, the depression tracked slowly west-northwest" - this is right after you said the system was upgraded to Longwang. Was this sentence misplaced? Or did you mean to say "the storm"
  • "A temporary turn northwest occurred on September 26 as Longwang approached a weakness in the ridge previously steering it west-northwest" - eek, a bit of a run-on. I would change the end to "which had previously steered west-northward." But your call.
  • "By this time, prominent banding features were present around the storm." - you already said it had banding features a paragraph prior. What changed?
  • "Now tropical depression" - kinda awkward way to start the final MH sentence.
  • "For southern Taiwan, the main risk was fresh water flooding and 15 rivers were placed under high alert while 340 more were under moderate alert. " - I think this could be split in two.
  • "As the storm made landfall, 37 shelters opened across the island" - the shelters opened at the exact moment the storm made landfall?
  • "Guangdong Provinces" - if you're mentioning several, the "provinces" should be lower case. Also, don't think that should be part of the Guangdong link.
  • "Public transportation across the province was temporarily suspended as well. - which province?
  • "battered the islands of Ishigaki Iriomote" - are the last two things one island or two? If two, add a comma
  • "Four people sustained minor injuries in Ishigaki City from falling" - falling where? Down a cliff?
  • "nearly 1,000 people sought refuge in shelters" - you said the total was 906 in the preps section. Why mention this in the impact section?
  • "Chufeng grapes" - any chance for a link?
  • "struck Mainland China" - any reason for capital "Mainland"?
  • Find better "see also" articles. We don't link to List of tropical cyclones anymore, and the timeline isn't that helpful. I'd recommend any other typhoons that struck Taiwan and China. Perhaps Typhoon Herb, which was similarly deadly?

All in all, good job. Just minimal stuff before I'll pass it. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 05:18, 26 July 2013 (UTC)Reply

I believe I've addressed everything. Thanks for the review Hink!! Cyclonebiskit (talk) 16:59, 26 July 2013 (UTC)Reply