Talk:The Weekend (SZA song)

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 06:13, 14 October 2018 (UTC)

Lead

• Contains several details unnedeed for the lead (such as the song's longly-described performance on the US market)

Infobox

• Cover needs ALT text
• cite the liner notes of Ctrl after the "Format" and "Length" parametres, since this information can only be obtained from the album (sice the original version wasn't released digitally on its own)

Background and production

• First of all, specify who wrote and produced the song and link with the liner notes of Ctrl: ""The Weekend" was written by [WRITERS], while production was handled by [PRODUCERS]"
• Producer ThankGod4Cody → Don't need the "Producer" part
• After being handed the sample → After being handed a sample from the song
• and bass.[1] He then presented his initial finished production → and bass,[1] and presented the resulting product
• singing because of its "fun" and "crazy" atmosphere → do you mean she started singing because of that?
• who felt surprised by the subject of the lyrics → who felt surprised by their subject
• After some experimentation, ThankGod4Cody clipped the vocals from the sample, moved it to the beginning of the song following by the inclusion of drumming and some reverberation, he placed the song's snares and hi-hats, and a cymbal, finishing the song's instrumental. → This sentence is too unnecessarily long, so you can shorten it: "ThankGod4Cody subsequently produced the whole track's instrumental, adding clipped vocals from the sample, drums, snares, hi-hats, cymbals and reverberation.
• The song also features writing from music producers Timbaland and Danja → You don't need this anymore since you list all writers and producers of the song at the beginning of the section
• It was mixed → The song was mixed (as some may think you're talking about her vocals)
• Please include the labels that released the song
• Say that the song was released as a single from Ctrl and link the album

Music and lyrics

• its four minutes and thirty-two seconds → its four minutes and 32 seconds
• Which reference cite "a soft, slow-burning melody"?
• Which sources cite "with finger-snaps, key thumps that resemble the sound of a ticking clock, hi-hats and a high-pitched vocal sample" ?
• a "side chick"[4][2][10][11] → refs are not in chronological order
• For her, this song is about feeling → Change "this song" to just "the song"
• the narrator's lover tries to play her → what exactly do you mean here?
• As the song advances, its original instrumental disappears and it becomes more uptempo where she sings, "bright ideas, we got bright ideas" over a thumbing percussion and backing chants → Not everything you say is backed up by the source; please rewrite to: "As the song advances, its instrumental "roll[s] over into a more anthemic chant" where SZA sings "bright ideas, we got bright ideas".

Reception

• Link "music critics" to Music criticism
• Link the singers that is spoken about in the Consequence of Sound quote
• "faintly like a classic Brandy single" → Who or what is Brandy? Is there a Wiki?
• Echoing the sentiment of Kennedy from Los Angeles Times, Aaron Williams of Uproxx called "The weekend" a "sexy, slow-burner" and "a clear standout from ... Ctrl".[21] → This should come directly after the Los Angeles Times quote
• Natty Kasambala who writes for Crack Magazine → Natty Kasambala, writing for Crack Magazine,
• lays "her cards on the table" through these track → lays "her cards on the table" through these tracks
• "side-chick manifesto" → Link manifesto
• Link social media
• Almeida recognized SZA → Almeida recognized that SZA
• Link NPR here and in the ref
• reflected about it saying → reflected about the song, saying
• Sidney Madden of NPR considered it the ninth best song of 2017 → Unlink NPR here as already linked before
• the ninth best song of 2017 → the ninth-best song of 2017
• praising its sample and commenting → praising its sampling and commenting
• of The Advocate was extremely positive → "extremely" is a bit of WP:FANCRUFT; replace the word with "similarly"

Chart performance

• Change the name of this section to "Commercial performance"
• Without being released as a single at then moment → Without being released as a single at that moment
• I copy-edited the rest of this section by myself, as there were a handful of grammatical mistakes and several things not important or not backed up by a source
• In another paragraph, detail on the song's commercial performance outside the United States? What other certifications did it get?

Music video

• The accompanying music video → To not start that abruptly, I would say "An accompanying music video"
• a year prior to the video's shot and they were excited about working together, saying → Skip the "and they were...together", as this is not relevant for the article
• for each location, however, only four were → replace the comma before "however" with a semicolon (;)
• only four were included in the final version of the video → Also ref number 47 for this statement
• her head, behind her image → replace the comma with a semicolon; also, it isn't "behind", but "under"
• while performs sensually → while performing sensually
• in a parking lot wearing an yellow-colored transparent clothing → remove the "an"
• she is on an empty art studio → she resides in an empty art studio
• surrounded by red and blue glasses → surrounded by red and blue rectangular glass surfaces
• and light sheets covering the scenery. → ??
• The rest of the video, shows intercepted scenes → The rest of the video shows scenes
• previous mentioned building's balcony → aforementioned building's balcony
• parking lot while also appears → parking lot, while also appearing
• in an empty garden in a checkered leotard → in an empty garden wearing a checkered leotard
• It ends with SZA in a stairs → It ends with SZA lying on stairs
• bodysuit, under her, the same → bodysuit; beneath her, the same
• At the end of the "Synopsis and conception" section, please also reference the music video on YouTube, as you described its plot
• For the reception, you need an 'overall sentence', such as "Reviewers received the music video..."
• compared the song to the visuals of the video commenting that although in the song → compared the track to the visuals, commenting that altough (no comma after this)
• Hunter Harris observed that "The Weekend" video goes for something "abstract" → Hunter Harris observed that "The Weekend" video implies an "abstract" concept
• as the other editors, she viewed the video as → as the other editors; she viewed the video as
• and further wrote thst it is → that
• with negative commentaries from some publications → attracting negative commentaries from some publications
• from Fuse website → Don't need to say "website"
• to that of Solange Knowles's "Cranes in the Sky" → we only need Solange's last name
• describing it as a "watered-down version" → comma before "writing"
• of the mentioned song's music video → of the aforementioned song's music video

Remix and covers

• was available for digital download → was made available for digital download
• turned the song into a funk production with influences of old-school house music as noted by a Rap-Up's writer → This is not supported by the source. What the source says is just that it was a "house jam".

Live performances

Credits and personnel

• Flawless :)

Track listing

• Flawless :)

Charts

• Fixed by myself

Certifications

• Corrected by myself

Release history

• Flawless :)

Outcome

• @UrbanJE: As you see, I did not review the whole article, but several issues have rosen up in the sections I've already reviewed. Very often, there are (basic) grammar issues and many times, what you say in the article can't be supported by a source (such as the description of genres featured in Harris's remix). These are far to many issues for you to solve in a short period of time, so I'm failing this for now. As always, you can work on the article in accordance with my comments and renominate again. Btw, I like the song and the music video . Best regards; Cartoon network freak (talk) 22:46, 20 October 2018 (UTC)

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