Talk:St. Valentine's Day (30 Rock)

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Flash ^{I am Jack's complete lack of surprise} 02:25, 1 April 2010 (UTC) Hi. I'll be reviewing this as part of April's GAN Backlog Elimination Drive. See Talk:I Married Marge/GA1 for my GAN setup. I've placed the article on hold; good luck improving the article. The Flash ^{I am Jack's complete lack of surprise} 02:25, 1 April 2010 (UTC)

Lead

• I'd suggest adding in what number the episode is overall in the series continuity; i.e., "It was the 11th episode of the show's third season and the whatever episode overall."
  • Done. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE)
• In the plot paragraph, replace the semi-colon with a comma.
  • Done.
• In stead of "Nielsen ratings system," I'd suggest "Nielsen Media Research."
  • Done.

Plot

• @The whole of the first paragraph: What? Very confused here... Can you clean it up and make it more clear?
• I'm not feeling very solid about the rest of the prose in this section. Can you touch it up a notch?
  • I think I got it. If not, I'll get a copy-editor.
    • It's fine. The Flash ^{I am Jack's complete lack of surprise} 00:19, 2 April 2010 (UTC)

Production

• Everything in the first paragraph after the first sentence is unsourced.
  • It really doesn't need to be sourced, common sense, but removed.
• Surely there's a source that Kenneth is played by McBrayer? In fact, here's one off the top of my head.
  • Do we really need a source?
    • Everything in an article should be sourced except for the plot summary, IMO.
      • I forgot to update this. I added a source.
• "The episode was shot" → "The scene was shot"
  • Done.
• Join the last paragraph with the McDonald's one.
  • The McDonald's thing and the deleted scenes are way different things.
    • I just thought because they were each about filming, but whatevs.
• "In one of the cut scenes, was a conversation" Cleanup
  • I think I got it.
• A little too many commas in the last sentence.
  • I think I got it.

Reception

• Ratings thing: same as in lead.
  • Done.
• In EW's review: "theme; however,[...]"
  • I don't know what you mean, can you explain?
    • Oops, never mind; read it wrong.

Images

• No infobox screencap?
  • Don't know what image to use, so. Also, I don't want to violate the non-free content criteria.
    • How about this? It can meet the NFC criteria because it details how the apparent "product placement" was used. It's fine though if you don't want to use it.
      • Seems durable. What should I say for the caption? "Jack and Elisa buying McFlurry's and spending Valentine's Day together"? Also, one of the reasons I don't add a screenshot, cause I'm not good in "brainstorming" a readable caption. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 14:45, 2 April 2010 (UTC)'
        • LOL, how about just "Jack and Elisa buy McFlurry's on their Valentine's Day date"? The Flash ^{I am Jack's complete lack of surprise} 16:23, 2 April 2010 (UTC)
          • Yeah, exactly. Anyways, added screenshot to the article. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 16:49, 2 April 2010 (UTC)
• PD Jon Hamm image is fine.

Final say

Alright, I'm satisfied. Good job, I'm passing the article. Thanks for taking care of the issues. Cheers, The Flash ^{I am Jack's complete lack of surprise} 20:43, 2 April 2010 (UTC)

Thank you for the review, Flash, I appreciate it. :) --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 00:29, 3 April 2010 (UTC)

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