Talk:Sd.Kfz. 10

Latest comment: 14 years ago by Sturmvogel 66 in topic GA Review
Good articleSd.Kfz. 10 has been listed as one of the Warfare good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
Article milestones
DateProcessResult
May 19, 2009Good article nomineeListed
June 9, 2009WikiProject A-class reviewApproved
Current status: Good article

German terms edit

Befehlspanzerung shouldn't that be Behelfspanzerung? The first term just doesn't make sense. The literal translation of Befehlspanzerung is "command armour", while Behelfspanzerung means "makeshift armour". MisterBee1966 (talk) 10:22, 4 May 2009 (UTC)Reply

Good catch, I dropped the f when typing it. Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:24, 6 May 2009 (UTC)Reply

GA Review edit

This review is transcluded from Talk:Sd.Kfz. 10/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.


GA review of this version:
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GA review (see here for criteria)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS):  
    One question: the sentence The Sd.Kfz. 10/5 carried the 2 cm FlaK 38 whose mount was wider, if lighter, than that of the Flak 30, and the platform was enlarged to accommodate it from 1942, specifically the "if lighter" bit doesn't quite make sense to me. Should it be "wider, if not lighter" or "wider, and also lighter"?
  1. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
    Sources look fine, but there are a couple of citations that do not match the rest. Refs #12 and #24 need to be converted to just the last name (although in the case of Jantz's books, the year of publication needs to be added to each citation to differentiate them).
  2. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  3. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  4. It is stable.
    No edit wars etc.:  
  5. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
    Images all look good, but I do think they're too concentrated in the variants section, while other sections don't have any. In understand why you put them all in the variants section, but text-sandwiching is generally to be avoided. Maybe move the 10/1 photo in the variants section to the design and development section, and one of the 10/4s to the issue and use section?
  6. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  

Comments (which don't affect GA nomination):

  • Everything looks pretty good, except for the couple of minor things I pointed out above. I'm passing this article, but those things should be fixed before you take this article to A-class or FA. Nice work! Parsecboy (talk) 00:58, 19 May 2009 (UTC)Reply
Thanks, and I agree that your suggestions will help the article out. Thanks for the comments. Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 01:06, 19 May 2009 (UTC)Reply
Citations #12 and #24 are the only time that their source is used in the article. My policy has been not to put things in the references section that are only listed once exactly so I don't have to add a year to differentiate between the same author's works. Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 05:20, 19 May 2009 (UTC)Reply

Errors edit

The picture of "Feuerleitpanzerfahrzeug" is no Sd.Kfz.10 basis but a Sd.Kfz.6.