Talk:Pogrom: Kishinev and the Tilt of History

Latest comment: 5 years ago by Yilongmo in topic Comments


Moving forward on your article edit

Dear Mr or Ms Mo

Have you received any feedback from Ms Hina Shaikh?

Cannot tell here exactly how your contribution fits into existing article.

Your academic sources are fine although lots of problems with your actual footnotes.

You will need a lot of work editing your prose to bring it up to standards. Please work with the Teaching and Learning Commons.

DH--DHertzGSR (talk) 15:27, 4 December 2018 (UTC)Reply

Hi Professor Hertz,

I intended this article to be an addition because the book Pogrom: Kishinev and the Tilt of History provides a lot of additional information to the event. But I think it makes more sense if I just make it its own article. It won't let me change my article title to Pogrom: Kishinev and the Tilt of History on the website though.

I spent a lot of time rewriting everything and using active voice / varying sentence structure / adding footnotes. Please look at it again and see if it's ok.

Thanks — Preceding unsigned comment added by Yilongmo (talkcontribs) 20:12, 7 December 2018 (UTC)Reply

Comments edit

Hello!

I see the work you've put in since we last emailed! Great job. Now, have you seen Professor Hertz's comments below about working on your prose? Perhaps you can come meet with me in my office hours and I can work on it with you. My office is in SSB 250 and my office hours are from 11-12:30.Hishaikh (talk) 19:41, 6 December 2018 (UTC)HinaReply

Hi!

I rewrote everything using active voice / varying sentence structure / added footnotes / made references links. I think it is ready now. Please relook over my work thanks!! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Yilongmo (talkcontribs) 20:13, 7 December 2018 (UTC)Reply