Talk:National Youth Pride Services
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Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 01:28, 18 January 2022 (UTC)
Review edit
The intro paragraph is fantastic, but I think the History section needs a little work. The main thing is that it's not cited; I can see that you originally cited the Wikipedia article LGBT culture in Chicago, which was removed for being a circular link. I would fix this by citing the sources referenced in the LGBT culture in Chicago article, rather than the article itself. I also think that the first paragraph of the History section needs to be wrapped up with at least one sentence that explains how the information in the paragraph relates to National Youth Pride Services. Finally, the word "being" should probably be removed in the sentence "In the 1980's, the LGBTQ Democrats were the main political party being involved in Chicago." Alliemallie (talk) 20:09, 16 April 2018 (UTC)