Talk:McGarrah Jessee

Latest comment: 13 years ago by Jal6636 in topic Prose and tone

Prose and tone

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Some of the terminology on this article, such as "reputation for establishing deep relationships with its clients" and "award-winning brand campaign" (there are several other examples as well) sound more like a internal company prospectus or advertisement, rather than an encyclopedia entry. Such terms constitute puffery and should be avoided (and reworded). This applies even if gathered from sourced information. --nsaum75¡שיחת! 01:03, 13 September 2010 (UTC)Reply

These have been addressed. Removing tags. Jal6636 (talk) 12:23, 13 September 2010 (UTC)Reply