Talk:Killing of Dontre Hamilton

Latest comment: 7 years ago by Fjbenn in topic Potential Updates

Potential Updates edit

The citation link (#14) referencing a similar incident in Milwaukee at a later time does not lead to the correct article. This sentence, the last on the page, indicates that the actions of the police department did not reflect their assertions following the original incident, and it would be both pertinent and thorough to include updated and correct information. As it has been several years since the event occurred, an update on the situation and the department more generally would also be a positive contribution to the page.

The section and language regarding the Black Lives Matter Movement could be expanded significantly to accurately interpret the information in the cited article. The single sentence could be significantly expanded to show the more detailed information regarding the Black Lives Matter movement's more significant involvement. This addition and clarification would strengthen the article generally, as well as provide the reader with a more detailed and accurate account of the protest following the shooting.

Overall, this article could be expanded and updated to show how the event and its actors have changed over time. The citations and sources generally appear to be unbiased and legitimate, and the article does not have a significant bias displayed in its language or inclusion of information. Fjbenn (talk) 01:31, 2 February 2017 (UTC)Reply