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  This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 18 April 2017 and 16 December 2017. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Profemanley. Peer reviewers: Jtodd1973, Rmlouis.

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I appreciate the lead section that offers a useful overview of Mayer's life and political activism. The Contents offer balanced sections that seem to span the most significant elements of Mayer's life and work. They also seem to offer areas for expansion as the page grows.

I have a few minor suggestions that might push the article towards more neutrality and less academic analysis:

  • In the lead section, Trujillo is referenced as a dictator twice. I think the second reference could just be to his name.
  • Under "Death and Legacy," the following sentence seems to lack neutrality without a direct/immediate citation. It seems like a logical claim to make given the other citations in this article, but I think it could be framed/phrased differently to increase its neutrality. "Her legacy as a pioneering feminist and early female politician has been completely overshadowed by the many foreign journalist reports that she was a celestina, or madam, for the dictator."
  • I wonder about how often to cite a source after historical information is reported. I would tend toward citing more often, even the same sources within closer proximity to each other.

Overall, I found this article a strong foundation from which more information might be added. Rmlouis (talk) 16:44, 16 September 2017 (UTC)Reply

Thanks Ross! I have made the first changes you suggested, and will work on adding additional citations when I have a few more minutes. Thanks! Profemanley (talk)profemanley