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  This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Slu30, Wlee74. Peer reviewers: Kevin duffy9, Hewilliam7.

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I think that overall, this is a really good start for the wikipedia article. There is definitely a lot of good information already, and I like how you guys already worked on the article structure by putting in blank headers. However, I think that more information could be added to the lead section. For example, some of the information from the biography section could be included within the lead section to give readers more background on Mall. Also, information on his education would be helpful. Additionally, some images would add a lot to the article. A couple of things (like Ann Arbor and Carl Ludwig in the education section) need to be linked to existing wikipedia pages. Also, including what German university Mall went to would be helpful (unless the labs that he worked in weren't attached to any university). Good job overall though! Hewilliam7 (talk) 23:40, 16 March 2017 (UTC)Reply