Talk:Effect and Cause

GA Review

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Reviewer: Alexandra IDV (talk · contribs) 16:13, 14 October 2020 (UTC)

I will be reviewing this~--Alexandra^IDV 16:13, 14 October 2020 (UTC)

Lead/infobox

• As a portion of a larger work, I believe level names should be written within quotation marks, similarly to how episodes of TV series are handled.
• I do think a slightly more detailed explanation of what is happening in the image might be in order. If this ends up feeling too lengthy for an infobox caption, consider moving the image to a relevant spot in the article body.
• The image's non-free use rationale states it is "a single low-resolution screenshot", which does not seem 100% correct here.

Summary

• Is Typhon the planet this takes place on? It's unclear.

Concept and creation

• Life After People, which depicted - this should be in present tense, correct? Since the series still exists and still depicts those things.
• "incomprehensible geo" should be rewritten as too jargon-heavy for general readers. I'm assuming it's referring to level geometry?

Reception

• The "something players should experience before Christmas" bit feels a bit nonsensical and out of nowhere. I would recommend rewriting it to make clear what they're really saying - that it's a highlight of the year in games that one should get around to experiencing

Not mandatory for GAN but still recommended

• Alt text for the image would aid readers with impaired vision a lot.

Outside of this, it looks pretty good. I will put this on hold for a week; ping me when you have addressed the issues or if you have any questions, and I'll reply asap.--Alexandra^IDV 18:02, 14 October 2020 (UTC)

Dealt with issues. - Bryn (talk) (contributions) 20:01, 14 October 2020 (UTC)

Thank you! I made a small tweak to the geometry quotation, feel free to tweak it further if you wish. Regardless: congratulations, this is now a GA.--Alexandra^IDV 10:07, 15 October 2020 (UTC)