Talk:Cherry Pop/GA2

GA Review

Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 03:01, 15 March 2016 (UTC)

Hello, I am Carbrera, and I'll be reviewing this article for possible good article submission.

Full review coming very soon. Carbrera (talk) 03:01, 15 March 2016 (UTC)

Infobox

• In the image's alt, add a space after "be seen." and change the period into a semicolon
• Capitalize the 'a' in alt so it's in the same style as everything else (just for appearance sake)
• Remove the flatlist from genre as only one genre is listed

Lead

Paragraph 1

• Change the digital download link from "digital distribution" to "music download"
• Change 'from the record.o 'from Unlocked.'

Paragraph 2

• 'Regisor' is not a word
• Remove the 'a' before choreography
• Remove 'inside a white room'; it's unnecessary
• Is it necessary that we include it topped the iTunes charts in Japan? I mean, Adele's "Hello" topped like 40some iTunes charts and none of it's mentioned in her article

Composition

• Change section title to 'Background and composition'
• Change 'Further working' to 'Further's work'; this sentence needs to be worded as there are too many clauses
• Change "Stan's interviews prior to the release of 'Cherry Pop'.[5] She also noticed influences..." to "Stan's interviews prior to the release of 'Cherry Pop'; she also noticed influences..." (This means you should also move Ref #5 to the end of the sentence)
• Say "An administrator of IasiFun..."
• Remove the link to 'kiss'

Reception

Paragraph 1

• Rename this section 'Critical reception'
• Please provide a topic sentence, like: "Cherry Pop" received generally mixed reviews from music critics upon release.
• I don't understand what the first sentence (the one about The Singles Jukebox) you have is trying to convey
• Anthony Easton's review belongs more in composition than here
• Remove the date from Hitfire's review; just say "Hitfire praised the song's chorus as being..."
• 'Chours' is not a word
• Is 'trashy' a good thing?

Yes, it is.

• Add 'like' before you list "her previously launched songs"
• Change 'launched' to 'released'
• Hitfire's review is overly long; could the last sentence be removed? And, are there more reviews available for this song? Perhaps you could look at album reviews for more...

Paragraph 2

• Rename this section 'Commercial performance'
• Again, is the iTunes information really necessary?
• Organisers → Organizers
• native Airplay 100 → Romanian Radio Airplay Chart
• Add the last sentence to the end of the one before it, using a semicolon

Live performances

• Change to "On 12 December 2014, Stan performed both "Cherry Pop" and "Vanilla Chocolat" on an episode of Vocea Romaniei"
• Italicize Vocea Romaniei
• How is Ref #2 citing that is was performed during her tours? Isn't it the album's notes?

Music video

Paragraph 1

• Move this section before 'Live performances'
• Remove the photo of a tennis racket
• Upload a photo of the music video under fair use to the article
• I don't know if Stan's quote of the right side of the section is needed; could you reduce it and include it in the paragraph instead?

Paragraph 2

• gets enlightened → becomes enlightened
• gets a tennis racket → retrieves a tennis racket
• before putting it down and giving it to a fellow dancer on her left → before returning the racket to a nearby dancer
• Again, 'chours' is not a word
• Synchroned is not a word
• What do you mean by 'dressing wigs'?
• multicoloured → multicolored
• The last two sentences need to be reworded; there are far too many clauses in these sentences

Credits and personnel

• Move this section below 'Track listings'

Track listings

• You only need one source for the digital download

Release history

• The release dates are not in chronological order; please fix this

Charts

• Move this above 'Release history'

References

• [14] - Italicize Vocea Romaniei
• [17] - Provide a link to YouTube
• [21] - Provide a link to iTunes Store

A few more changes

• Please add sortables to the charts; view Baby Don't Lie#Charts to see what I mean and as an example
• Make the music video picture a bit larger
• Remove the 'Reception' header' and remove an equal sign from the beginning and end of 'Critical reception' and 'Commercial performance'
• Remove the 's' in "A 23-seconds sample..." under the audio sample

@Cartoon network freak: After this I'll pass the article; thanks for your cooperation. Carbrera (talk) 00:29, 26 March 2016 (UTC)

@Carbrera All done! Thank you very much for your time! Cheers, Cartoon network freak (talk) 00:38, 26 March 2016 (UTC)

End of GA Review:

This article needs a bit of work before passing, so I'm gonna put it on hold. Thank you. Carbrera (talk) 16:40, 25 March 2016 (UTC)

@Carbrera Everything done and responded to one of your comments. Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 00:08, 26 March 2016 (UTC)