Talk:Bonnie Sherk

Comments

I'm an online ambassador for your WMST 250: Women, Art, and Culture (2014 Q3) class and have just stopped by to provide a quick review and add what I hope will be helpful comments.

You've done great work on your article about Bonnie Ora Sherk, particularly on her career and three important works.

Some suggestions are:

• There's no information about her background or education. Per her ISNI record, she was born in 1940. It would be good to have some background information. You may want to check out Anita Berrizbeitia which has a short background section.
• It's usual to have the year of birth following the subject's name in the introduction.
• I haven't been quite sure what of the sections are titles versus place names - so I took a stab. It seems like Public Lunch is a work of art, so I put it in italics, and the other two are places, and don't need quotes or italics. If I'm wrong, though, please make the adjustment.
• Two of the citations are incomplete. At a minimum, citations usually have a title, publisher, and if applicable: author, location, year/date, accessdate and url if there's a website.

I'll check in on you again, and I'll be watching this page if you have any questions or comments.--CaroleHenson (talk) 03:51, 1 November 2014 (UTC)

I moved the comments, some of these are still issues. Good job working on this article!--CaroleHenson (talk) 04:06, 14 November 2014 (UTC)

Paraphrasing

CarolineHeyman, There are some close paraphrasing issues with the following statements:

• "Sherk is a professional artist who exhibits her work in museums and galleries around the world. Her work has also been published in art books, journals, and magazines." Where the only difference between the source is "around" vs. "all over".
• "integrates interdisciplinary, standards-based, hands-on learning, community ecological planning and design, and state-of-the-art communications technologies" is an exact copy from the source.
• "The Farm is a 7 acre eco garden and art space that spreads across traffic meridians and underused spaces under freeway overpasses. It even includes animals. This piece provided internships, educational activities for children, and acted as a public park throughout its duration." this is kind of a shifting of chunks of phrases, but not really reworded. Many would consider this a close paraphrasing issue.

The sentences should be reworded in your own words, including changing the order of some of the words and using synonyms. See close paraphrasing article. Articles can be deleted for copyright violations. Thanks!--CaroleHenson (talk) 04:16, 14 November 2014 (UTC)

Content that appears to be copyrighted content has been commented out of the article, per User talk:CaroleHenson#reply--CaroleHenson (talk) 23:12, 18 November 2014 (UTC)

Instead of having a Career heading with a Belief subheading underneath it, I would change it to only the Belief heading since you talk mostly about her beliefs and not much about her career. Amsinger (talk) 19:09, 19 November 2014 (UTC)

I would also suggest including information about where (which museums) her famous works of art are displayed. Amsinger (talk) 19:18, 19 November 2014 (UTC)

Improving the page

I added more information about works; participation in group exhibitions; Awards. I always cited the information added and put the hyperlinks whenever possible. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Borboleta8 (talk • contribs) 21:58, 23 May 2020 (UTC)

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