Talk:A Newsboy Hero

Latest comment: 9 years ago by Jaguar in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 22:51, 19 September 2015 (UTC)Reply


Another Marie article. I should complete this tomorrow hopefully JAGUAR  22:51, 19 September 2015 (UTC)Reply

Initial comments

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  • The leads needs to be expanded slightly to summarise the article
  • I would recommend splitting plot and production into two sections
  • "His alcoholism had caused much strife in his home and his wife" - informal
  • Salvation Army could be linked in the lead
  • " The Billboard‍ '​ review" - typo

Close - promoted

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I had to do a little bit of cleaning up, but this should be good to go. The references are adequate and the article is quite comprehensive given the era. Well done   JAGUAR  22:36, 19 September 2015 (UTC)Reply