Talk:A-Space
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Confusing and Wikify
editMy main concern(s) now is/are that the intro section is long enough to be a good stub articel on its own and rather overwhelming. The first paragraph of it would make a good intro and the rest of the information could be another section, or follow the ToC.
Secondly, some phrases sound a little "popular press"-ish (EG. "If all this sounds incredibly expensive", "That's why the site", etc.).
Having said that, I appreciate the tone of your message and the quality of the articel's contents. 68.39.174.238 (talk) 20:47, 27 April 2008 (UTC)
- OK, see if this is better. I split up the intro and paraphrased some of the more dramatic quotes.Howard C. Berkowitz (talk) 21:27, 27 April 2008 (UTC)
- Excellent. One last thing: I would move the page to "Intelligence Community" is uppercased as a proper name. I don't know if "US" should be spelled out or not. 68.39.174.238 (talk) 14:38, 2 May 2008 (UTC)
Confusion
editThe section on tactical user needs does not appear to have anything to do with A-Space. I read the references, which do not describe A-Space.
There is also another more recent reference from CNN that would add valuable content to the article. CNN article on A-Space.
The section, Defense Intelligence Agency initial contribution, implies that the DIA Force Protection database will be in A-Space. The reference doesn't state this.
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