Talk:1804 Antigua–Charleston hurricane

Latest comment: 10 years ago by Secret in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: Secret (talk · contribs) 19:18, 15 March 2014 (UTC)Reply

I'll be reviewing this article sometime this week. Thanks Secret account 19:18, 15 March 2014 (UTC)Reply

Great read, only some minor nitpicks

  • "By 4 September, the storm arrived at the Bahamas and turned northward before approaching the coast of northern Florida by 6 September." Shouldn't by be "on".
  • "Remaining offshore, it eventually came ashore along the coastline of Georgia and South Carolina while producing mostly southeasterly winds" - Bit repetitive with "Remaining offshore" and then suddenly mentioning came ashore. Fix.
  • "Maritime losses offshore both states were significant," - grammar.
  • "3 September as it swept past Saint Barthélemy, Saint Kitts, and Antigua on 3 September," Remove the second mention of "3 September".
  • "Betsy was stripped of its freight and somewhat injured" - Ships can't be "somewhat injured", reword.
  • "littered the island which was completely inundated during the storm." - comma after island
  • "and at some, vessels became stacked upon each other." Some what? Wharves?
  • "numerous animals were also killed in the flood, leaving behind carcasses." Well when an animal dies, it become a carcass, so "leaving behind carcasses" is redundant, remove.
  • "Several ships sank in Boston's harbor, while at Salem, the South Church's steeple was toppled.[6]" Are you talking about this storm, or the unrelated storm a week later? Clarify.
  • No close paraphrasing concerns, all the sources are reliable, image is free, however the PD tag should be fixed on the image.
yesyesyes i fixed these issues, do i get a hug from you now Cloudchased (talk) 02:56, 1 April 2014 (UTC)Reply

Ok everything fixed so passing. Secret account 02:56, 1 April 2014 (UTC)Reply