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God of War: Ascension is a 2013 action-adventure game developed by Santa Monica Studio and published by Sony Computer Entertainment for the PlayStation 3 console. It is the seventh installment in the God of War series and prequel to the entire series. The player controls Kratos, the former servant of the Greek god of war Ares, who tricked Kratos into killing his own wife and daughter. Kratos, who renounced Ares and was imprisoned and tortured by the Furies, confronts them after escaping with the aid of Orkos. The gameplay is similar to previous installments, focusing on combo-based combat and quick time events, and adds a promptless, free-form system. It is the only installment to include a multiplayer mode. Ascension received generally favorable reviews from critics, although the story was generally deemed to be less compelling than previous entries. (This article is part of a featured topic: God of War franchise.)

JDC808 (and anyone else interested): thoughts and edits are welcome. There's no rush; this hasn't been scheduled at TFA yet. This batch finishes up blurbs for FACs promoted in 2017. - Dank (push to talk) 14:01, 11 January 2020 (UTC)Reply

Is this prepping it to have a TFA this year? I usually try to nominate these for an anniversary date (generally the date the game released). Also edited some incorrect information and removed the last sentence as it wasn't important enough to include IMO. --JDC808 15:02, 11 January 2020 (UTC)Reply
On that question, pinging Wehwalt ... the release date is March 12, which isn't already taken at WP:TFAP, and there aren't any other video games currently contemplated for March that I know of. About the blurb: the mythological Ares was the "god of war", not the "God of War". Of course, in this game, he's the God of War ... but that's a second meaning that will confuse most readers, since he was also the "god of war", so I've lowercased. About the tense: plot summaries take the present tense. Of course, if something happened before the start of this game's storyline, then that would be in past or present perfect tense ... but since blurbs are so short, we don't generally say much about what happened before the events of this game. Put everything you can in the present tense (that is, every event where a reasonable case can be made for the present tense), and then if there's still too much in the past tense, I'll trim some of that. - Dank (push to talk) 15:26, 11 January 2020 (UTC)Reply
Don't see how it would be confusing to readers as it's being used as a title (which is how the games treat it), as opposed to just saying he is a god of war. Not enough of an issue here to get pedantic about it though. --JDC808 16:08, 12 January 2020 (UTC)Reply
Thanks. Can any of the plot be moved into the present tense in a way that makes sense for this installment in the series? - Dank (push to talk) 16:33, 12 January 2020 (UTC)Reply
Well, the plot info in the sentence beginning with "The player controls" will always be past tense because it's an event that predates the games' narrative (it's only ever seen in flashbacks). "Kratos renounced Ares" is also something that would have to be past tense as it comes right after that event; this game is set 6-months after that. The game itself is set over a 4-week period. It begins in the present, with Kratos imprisoned, and then jumps back and forth between the past and present, with the parts in the past showing how he got imprisoned, while the present shows him escaping and hunting down the Furies. --JDC808 02:45, 13 January 2020 (UTC)Reply
PresN: since you're an FLC delegate and a stalwart at VG, and you've dealt with similar issues many times ... I'd be grateful for your opinions here, but there's no obligation, of course. - Dank (push to talk) 18:29, 12 January 2020 (UTC)Reply
To me it reads cleaner as lowercase "god of war", likely because it's prefixed by "Greek" - in the article lead, it's just "the God of War Ares", which makes it clear it's a title rather than a description. --PresN 04:01, 13 January 2020 (UTC)Reply
Thanks. I'll go ahead and add this to TFAP for March. - Dank (push to talk) 04:03, 13 January 2020 (UTC)Reply