Wikipedia:WikiProject Video games/Peer review/TimeSplitters 2

TimeSplitters 2

I've been doing a lot of work on this article trying to at least get it up a B ranking and possibly higher. I requested it get assessed a couple of times, but it remained start-class.Wi Account ki 21:39, 12 May 2007 (UTC)

User:Clyde Miller

An interesting game I had a lot of fun with. Some suggestions.

• "The soundtrack for TimeSplitters 2 can be found here." Remove any and all external links within the article itself and move to the external links section.
• The external links section could use some cleanup. I'd keep only the official site, the timesplitter wiki, and the moby games one. The IGN should be in the references section in the form of a review; the Gamefaqs is game guide material and a dead link anyway, TSmusic box should probably be a ref for audio, and the last two are random fan sites.
• The See Also needs to be slimmed down to only links that don't appear in the article. I'd say race and series.
• References should be done using Template:cite web. Try and get an author, publisher, title, url, date of page, access date, and format if needed.
• Trivia should be removed or integrated into the article. There should be no trivia section at all.
• "The game was praised for its vast array of multiplayer options, its diverse range of unique story mode levels, and its co-operative mode." Wait what? How about an intro sentence? Maybe a reference to overall scores; I usually use MetaCritic or GameRankings. Also this sentence is completely unreferenced.
• Reception section needs to be expanded. There needs to be more critical opinions and points whether they be direct quotes or paraphrasing. One PP on general scores and comments, one paragraph on good things, one PP on bad things. I've also seen it written by going down the line showing opinions on gameplay, then graphics, then sound etc.
• If there is so much written about sound and it is already mentioned in the lead, I'd write an audio section, perhaps listing the songs in template form, talking about it's creation or reception, or anything else notable about it.
• There are many statements that need to be citied and have POV problems. Look also at WP:CITE. I'll give you a list later or put in fact tags.
• Story mode comes after gameplay mode.
• Some picture placements bother me. The dam one should be moved up put on the right, and the setup of the story pic and gameplay pic bother me.
• Remove the list of arcade modes.
• Prose has problems. I'll try to point them out later.

More on the way.--Clyde (talk) 23:14, 12 May 2007 (UTC)

Other things.

• The cover has no fair use rationale and the game images should have more detailed ones. See here for ideas.
• Perfect Dark is an FPS featured article, which could give you some direction. Also VG FAs are a good place to look for ideas.
• The publication box lacks some reviews. I have a ton of websites on my userpage you can go to here.
• Anytime there is a game (I.E. TimeSplitters: Future Perfect) it should be in italics (TimeSplitters: Future Perfect) Done
• The plot section could be a bit longer. Maybe describe what happens in the levels, but not too long. See other story sections for ideas. You may also want to put in a character section (small list of characters introducing them to the reader).

I also dropped some fact tags that need to be taken care of. Prose is a whole different can of worms, so let's deal with that later.--Clyde (talk) 00:39, 13 May 2007 (UTC)

User:Krator

I had written a lenghty assessment on the article a while ago, but nothing was done about most of the points.

• Some things need to be changed, though. Remove the external link, and change the prose to fit a more encyclopaedic tone. An example of the current bad state is the last sentence: "but it is not known when". Done
• Gameplay starts out well-written, but gradually turns into the game guide information often seen in bad video game articles.
• Remove the list in Arcade.  Done
• Remove the distinction between modes. These are not specific to the game and irrelevant - what a 'story' or 'arcade' mode is should not be explained here. Done
• The whole section has no citations. Look up some reviews of the game, and see what they write about the gameplay, then use them to reference the article.
• Gameplay needs copy-editing.
• Reception is too short - discuss what some specific reviewers have written if not enough reviews exist. Also discuss pre-game release reception (previews).
• Remove trivia.  Done
• Remove fansites from external links.  Done

--User:Krator (t c) 01:01, 13 May 2007 (UTC)

PS: I would appreciate marking points in this review with a {{done}} template, if any edits are made because of it.