Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Assessment/Roy Inwood
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Inwood is the next one in a series I am working on to get all the South Australian recipients of the VC to FA. In 1917, he performed several actions during the Battle of the Menin Road which resulted in him being recommended for the VC, including playing a lead role in capturing or killing the garrisons of two German machine gun posts. He survived the war and served again in WWII on the home front. Unlike the many VCs that are held by the Australian War Memorial, his VC is displayed in the Adelaide Town Hall. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 04:07, 5 February 2019 (UTC)
Comments from AustralianRupert
editSupport': G'day, PM, nice work. I have a couple of minor comments/suggestions, but overall it looks pretty good to me: AustralianRupert (talk) 06:54, 6 February 2019 (UTC)
- do we know what Edward Inwood's occupation was?
- do we know how Evelyn died?
- Not in sources. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 01:54, 9 February 2019 (UTC)
- I wonder if the siblings should be mentioned in the Early life section as well?
- Hunted up the family structure and added. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 01:54, 9 February 2019 (UTC)
- on 11 October, and was discharged on 12 December: perhaps clarify here that the war had ended in November?
- the infobox mentions that he passed away at St Peters, but I couldn't find this in the body of the article
- in the References, suggest decaplising "INWOOD HAROLD RAY" and "INWOOD ROBERT MINNEY" per MOS:ALLCAPS
- the link provided for "nee" is duplicated
Thanks for taking a look, AustralianRupert! Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 01:54, 9 February 2019 (UTC)
- Too easy, looks good. AustralianRupert (talk) 02:57, 10 February 2019 (UTC)
Image review - images are correctly licensed. And those "before/blasted moonscape" images always fascinate me. Parsecboy (talk) 18:14, 8 February 2019 (UTC)
- They are quite evocative of the destruction artillery can cause, aren't they? What a nightmare to be crouched in a shallow trench during that... Thanks for the image review, Nate. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 01:54, 9 February 2019 (UTC)
Comments Support from Indy beetle
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Nice biography of a rugged individual. My comments
- Reginald Roy Inwood, VC (14 July 1890 – 23 October 1971) was an Australian soldier and recipient of...
- Not a point I really care much about, but is it necessary to state Inwood's age at the time of his enlistment? We have his exact birth date and date of enlistment, and it seems unnecessary to state his age unless he was unusually young or old.
- and other than a short period in hospital in May Is it known what for?
- The information in the notes for the photos needs to be sourced.
- fatigue duties Wikilink to fatigue duty
- Attacking the second objective Which was?
- No longer welcome in Broken Hill Was the general public upset with his comments?
- He was medically discharged on 30 November 1944. Is it known what for?
- The Genealogy SA reference is currently using a deprecated parameter; this should be resolved.
-Indy beetle (talk) 05:30, 23 April 2019 (UTC)
- G'day Indy beetle thanks for the review. I removed the notes, as they weren't strictly necessary and I couldn't reliably source the descriptions. I think the two images speak for themselves. Have addressed your other comments too. Here are my edits. Cheers, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 02:38, 26 April 2019 (UTC)
- All my comments are addressed, and the article otherwise appears to me to meet the A-class criteria. -Indy beetle (talk) 04:29, 26 April 2019 (UTC)
Support from Zawed
editI reviewed this article back in January 2019 for its GA status. Looking at it again with fresh eyes, and assessing the changes made since my review, I am satisfied it meets the A-Class criteria. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 08:02, 27 April 2019 (UTC)
- Thanks for taking another look, Zawed! Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 08:15, 27 April 2019 (UTC)
Source review from Vanamonde
editAll sources seem reliable, and are appropriately formatted. The name of the article rang a bell, and I found I had reviewed it for DYK; so I'm happy to see it here. I would like to do some spot-checks, because I'm nitpicky that way; if I haven't gotten to them in 48 hours or so, please feel free to ping me. Vanamonde (Talk) 21:46, 30 April 2019 (UTC)
- I've spotchecked many of the ADB sources. All of them seem appropriately used. I also spotchecked the Faulkner source. It supports the basic detail there, but I think we need to be careful with using a 2007 source describing a debate over the medal's location to state in Wikipedia's voice that the matter is still sensitive in 2019. Honestly, given the scope of the article, I'd say that sentence doesn't add much anyway; but in any case, I don't think it should be implying anything about events after the 2007. Vanamonde (Talk) 20:29, 1 May 2019 (UTC)
- No worries, have amended it to refer only to 2007. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 03:44, 2 May 2019 (UTC)
- I also spotchecked the Adelaide Town Hall source, and found nothing I objected to. Vanamonde (Talk) 20:29, 1 May 2019 (UTC)
- Minor, unrelated comment; Brigadier Arthur Blackburn seems like a good candidate for a redlink, if an article does not already exist. Vanamonde (Talk) 20:31, 1 May 2019 (UTC)
- Blackburn is linked earlier. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 03:44, 2 May 2019 (UTC)