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This is the second part of the treatment of American logistics in the Siegfried Line campaign. It chronicles a series of avoidable problems. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 20:07, 15 September 2021 (UTC)
Support Comments from Iazyges
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Completely forgot I had taken this up, apologies. I have made some edits, feel free to reverse them. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 19:02, 18 October 2021 (UTC)
Lede edit
- developed from a reluctance to accept new, efficient, field-tested items presumably they weren't reluctant to accept better items so much as reluctant to accept new items which were actually better, perhaps developed from a reluctance to accept new items, even when field-tested and efficient,
Changed to "reluctance to accept new items".
Background edit
- Operation Cobra, which commenced on 25 July, effected a turnaround in the operational situation by achieving a breakout from the Normandy lodgment area for a layman reader it may not be clear who is breaking out, perhaps Operation Cobra, which the Allies commenced on 25 July, effected a turnaround in the operational situation by achieving a breakout from the Normandy lodgment area
- Changed to "which the First Army commenced on 25 July". Hawkeye7 (discuss) 19:52, 18 October 2021 (UTC)
- Another army, the Ninth Army, suggest removing Another army
- Railways could not be repaired and pipelines constructed quickly enough I believe this and should be an or, or else Railways could not be repaired and pipelines were not constructed quickly enough
Development edit
- Littlejohn did not like the M1943 jacket at all. suggest Littlejohn did not approve of the M1943 jacket.
Footwear edit
- but it seems that the next generation was bigger suggest changing bigger to larger
Workarounds edit
- The armies worked around the shortages in several ways. The main one was ammunition rationing. The American command setup was an obstacle here not a big fan of these sentences, perhaps: Although the American command setup was an obstacle, the armies worked around the shortages in several ways, especially through ammunition rationing.
- it gave the 12th Army Group a much better picture of what was going on. suggest changing what was going on to the situation
Production edit
- $2,391 million in 2019 suggest $2.391 billion in 2019
Tanks edit
- the UK that had been acquired under Lend-Lease suggest the UK that had been acquired under the Lend-Lease policy
- Lend-Lease was a law, not a policy. It is usually referred to this way. See the Lend-Lease article. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 19:52, 18 October 2021 (UTC)
Liquid fuels edit
- the like of which suggest just which had
- That is all of my suggestions, apologies again for taking so long. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 19:02, 18 October 2021 (UTC)
Source review/Comments from AustralianRupert edit
Support: G'day, Hawkeye, nice work as usual. Sorry, I don't have time for a full review at the moment, so I have a few minor points, including a source review: AustralianRupert (talk) 12:34, 10 October 2021 (UTC)
- ext links all work (no action required)
- all sources appear to be reliable based on authors or publishers (no action required)
- spot checked citations 78 and 107 - 78 seems GTG; I couldn't see the date of 25 December mentioned on 107, though. Did I miss it in the source?
- all information appears to be referenced (no action required)
- in the lead, "Northwestern Europe" is overlinked
- cold injury is overlinked in the Medical section
- "In 1944–45" --> "In 1944–1945"
- "with the 75mm gun M2–M6" --> non breaking space?
- 75 mm gun is overlinked in the Tanks section
- Siegfried Line is overlinked in the Liquid fuels section
- "woollen" --> "woolen" (US English?)
- "standardised" --> "standardized"? (as above)
- "despatched" --> "dispatched"? as above)
- "lodgement" --> "lodgment"?
- "totalled" --> "totaled"?
- "armoured" --> "armored"
- "recognise" --> "recognize"
- "coloured" --> "colored"
- "stablised" --> "stablized"
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- G'day, thanks, I will try to take a better look when I get back to a place with better internet (maybe in a few days, hopefully). In the meantime, a couple of the changes look a bit strange to me -- do Americans really use "improvize" and "supervize"? I could be wrong (I am more times than I would like), but that does not look correct to me. Can you please check? Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 14:15, 16 October 2021 (UTC)
- They only spell the suffix -ize in words that came to English through Latin -izare. Corrected. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 19:33, 16 October 2021 (UTC)
- Didn't realize the article was meant to be American English (although that does make sense), I've had another look through the article and don't see anything that stands out as non-American, except the usage of "Smart" appearance which I don't think really shares meaning to the average American, who might consider the used meaning as somewhere near the fourth possible meaning if they are even aware of it. Perhaps "a well kept" would work better. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 05:13, 21 October 2021 (UTC)
- They only spell the suffix -ize in words that came to English through Latin -izare. Corrected. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 19:33, 16 October 2021 (UTC)
Continuing the review below now: AustralianRupert (talk) 10:31, 20 October 2021 (UTC)
- in the lead " when the American Army" --> "United States Army" (as a proper noun) or "American army"?
- "Eisenhower decided to continue the pursuit of the retreating German forces beyond the Seine" --> potentially clarify what the other option was? I assume pausing and stablising LOC?
- "twelve divisions could" --> suggest linking divisions here
- "impressed by the British Battledress" --> "British battledress"?
- "Meanwhile, back in the United States the Quartermaster Corps" --> "back" is probably unnecessary
- Must be channelling Judy Woodruff here. Deleted. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 05:59, 21 October 2021 (UTC)
- "look he desired,[23] He informed" --> replace the comma with a full stop
- "even after the opening of Antwerp" --> link Antwerp?
- "However Stratton was unwilling" --> full name on first mention; comma after "However"?
- "Three DUKW companies" --> link DUKW here and remove it from the subsequent mention
- "supported by SOLOC" --> has "SOLOC" been defined at this point?
- "for bombers to delivery 41 percent of" --> "for bombers to deliver 41 percent of"
- sometimes you use the definite article and sometimes you don't, for instance "against Third Army's rail transport" v "contrast, the First Army had turned" --> suggest consistency
- "A major problem here was insufficient training in their use." --> "A major contributing factor was insufficient training in their use"?
- not quite sure about the Medical section being completely related to the topic of "supply" as such. When I saw the section header, I assumed it would be about the provision of Class VIII including blood products, rather than discussing casualty numbers, causes and backloading (arguablly not really a supply function, IMO). Potentially the article title could be "American supply and medical support in the Siegfried Line campaign"?
- Supply and services? Hawkeye7 (discuss) 05:59, 21 October 2021 (UTC)
- Yes, that would work for me. Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 11:56, 21 October 2021 (UTC)
- Supply and services? Hawkeye7 (discuss) 05:59, 21 October 2021 (UTC)
- "Somervell released servicemen" -- full name on first mention?
- "a T/O&E" v. "(TO&E)"
- "designated for MTOUSA" --> has this been defined yet?
- "struck by the German Ardennes Offensive" --> lower case "offensive" for consistency?
- "in coal in sacks" --> "of coal in sacks"
- "consequent rapid expansion the railways network" --> "consequent rapid expansion of the railways network"
All points addressed. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 05:59, 21 October 2021 (UTC)
Support from Vami edit
The American forces were struck with an epidemic of trench foot and frostbite [...]
Neither of these are contagious.[...] between June to November [...]
Recommend "between June and November" or "from June to November".Can you link military ranks?Link French towns too.[...] for which there were only fourteen berths. The situation hardly improved in October, at the end of which there were 80 ships and only eighteen berths.
Every number greater than 10 should be rendered with a numeral.- Not quite: Integers greater than nine expressible in one or two words may be expressed either in numerals or in words (MOS:NUMBER); but changed as suggested. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 19:06, 26 November 2021 (UTC)
By December, the backlog had not been reduced, but had grown [...]
The middle clause here could be removed with no loss in quality to the prose.[...] through the minor ports in Landing Ships, Tank, (LSTs).
The comma after "Tank" is unnecessary.Seventh Army, which was supported by the Southern Line of Communications (SOLOC) instead of COMZ, and therefore drew its supplies from NATOUSA, received winter clothing by air on 26 September.
I'm confused by the second and third clauses here.Others contained items duplicating ones that had already been re-issued.
Huh?[...] 2,110,000 sweaters and 2,270,000.
Missing word at the end.[...] a shortage of both in large and wide sizes.
Superfluous "in"?- Hi Vami_IV, how is this one looking now? Gog the Mild (talk) 11:10, 2 December 2021 (UTC)
[...] but Eisenhower decided that logistic situation was sufficiently [...]
"that the logistical situation was"The Third Army commenced a major offensive [...]
Which offensive was this? The Siegfried campaign?- The Battle of Metz. Linked. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 18:46, 3 December 2021 (UTC)
When a particular type looked as if it was going to be in short supply, the first army to recognize this could requisition as much as possible, thereby initiating the shortage and depriving the other armies of their fair share.
The first time I read this, I got very confused.- Changed to:
The first army to recognize that a particular type was going to be in short supply could requisition as much of it as possible, thereby initiating the shortage and depriving the other armies of their fair share.
[...] horizontal volute spring suspension (HVSS) [...] high velocity armor piercing (HVAP) [...]
Neither of these acronyms are used again.[...] taken away from bases sections [...]
Is "bases" intentional here?
Image review - pass edit
A very well illustrated article. Having inspected them all, the following may need checking for author information, as it seems the source (PhotosNormandie) is credited as the author which is not right. Perhaps "Author unknown, but likely US Army/Navy/Government personnel"?
- Yes, PhotosNormandie obtained US Army Signal Corps images. I have adjusted the credits on Commons. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 00:26, 2 December 2021 (UTC)
- File:Tanks are disembarked at Cherbourg.jpg
- File:Unloading the oil tanker Empire Traveller at Cherbourg.jpg
- Army Signal Corps photo (note Signal Corps id 198960-8 on the image)
- File:Aerial view of an oil tanker discharging at the digue de Querqueville.jpg
- File:Tanker trucks of the 3990th Quartermaster (Transportation Corps) Truck Company.jpg
- File:Refilling jerricans from tanker trucks.jpg
- Army Signal Corps photo (note Signal Corps id 198959-5 on the image)
The rest look to be appropriately licenced with US/CC tags. Zawed (talk) 23:32, 1 December 2021 (UTC)
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