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John S. Loisel
{{Done}} - nice work and appeared in DYK! – ukexpat (talk) 19:37, 8 February 2010 (UTC)
Double ace fighter pilot in World War II, Pacific.
Thanks,
(GregJackP (talk) 02:53, 29 January 2010 (UTC))
- Nice work - didn't need much review! I did change the lead to reflect the fact that he has died, made some minor formatting changes and added a refname for the Eagle bio and used that namedref where it appeared in the article (see WP:NAMEDREFS). I think this one is well worth a nomination for a DYK spot on the main page. Will come back here with a link when I have made the nomination. – ukexpat (talk) 16:43, 1 February 2010 (UTC)
- Nominated for DYK at Template talk:Did you know#John S. Loisel. – ukexpat (talk) 17:25, 1 February 2010 (UTC)
Thanks, this was my first effort at writing an article for Wiki. (GregJackP (talk) 17:28, 1 February 2010 (UTC))
List of prolific inventors
{{Done}}
Hi. I wrote my first article, List of prolific inventors in October last year, and it is still unreviewed. The page gets about 2,000 page views a month, and I have gone as far as I can think of in improving it. I would appreciate if someone could review it. Thanks ... AlexBartlett4 (talk) 23:57, 29 January 2010 (UTC)
- I fiddled with the formatting a little and added a lead paragraph, moved the Timeline link to a new See also section, and removed all the hard paragraph breaks. Apart from that looks good! – ukexpat (talk) 01:57, 30 January 2010 (UTC)
Doctor Geoff Waring
{{Done}} - deleted as a copyvio. – ukexpat (talk) 19:33, 8 February 2010 (UTC)
Hello I have included page on my younger brother Dr(Professor) Geoff Waring from Australia but Wikipedia has asked me clean up I am open to a Wikipedia editor cleaning it up to be presentable as my brother is a founder of AGSM(Economics) in Australia and his career has been noteworthy as he also recieved scholarship in United States last century to take him to status he identifies with today! I have added some additional family notes but am open to any ideas on this and need help on references if I can add also! Michael Waring Sydney Australia —Preceding unsigned comment added by 121.218.197.78 (talk) 05:47, 31 January 2010 (UTC)
- You're User:Skyblue38 and you're referring to Geoff Waring, right?
- Writing a Wikipedia article about your brother (or anyone you know personally) is generally a bad idea. A worse idea, though, is not writing it—instead, you copied his online bio (from http://www.scandinavianbusinessclub.com.au/news/Waring,%20G%20Biosketch%20March%202009.pdf) and pasted it into a new article. Sorry, but Wikipedia can't accept copyrighted information. Dori ❦ (Talk ❖ Contribs ❖ Review) ❦ 09:58, 31 January 2010 (UTC)
Article on author Connie Ann Kirk
{{done}} - article is cleaned up and live at Connie Ann Kirk. Dori ❦ (Talk ❖ Contribs ❖ Review) ❦ 03:57, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
I wrote an article for biographer and independent scholar Connie Ann Kirk: User:BKred/Connie Ann Kirk I believe it satisfies the guidelines for WP:Notability given that she has been reviewed by multiple periodicals (Booklist, School Library Review, Writers' Journal, etc.) Should I mention these reviews in the article? How does it look otherwise? Any input I can get is much appreciated, thanks! BKred (talk) 16:11, 23 December 2009 (UTC)
- The references that you have at the moment do not qualify as reliable sources as defined on Wikipedia - the first is the author's own site and answers.com is not, as far as I know, regarded as reliable. Please take a look at WP:AUTHOR for relevant notability guidelines. So yes, you will need to cite some of those "multiple periodicals" to support notability. – ukexpat (talk) 16:21, 23 December 2009 (UTC)
- Remember, also, that there's a big difference between mentioning a review (OK) and using selected pull quotes from a review, like you were compiling cover copy for a paperback release (not OK). --Orange Mike | Talk 19:42, 23 December 2009 (UTC) (writes occasional book reviews professionally)
- So should I include the actual review, or just include the fact that they were reviewed?BKred (talk) 19:53, 23 December 2009 (UTC)
- Certainly not the actual review (though a link to it would be OK); that would be a copyright violation, and also would constitute undue emphasis on the reviews. --Orange Mike | Talk 20:07, 23 December 2009 (UTC)
- So should I include the actual review, or just include the fact that they were reviewed?BKred (talk) 19:53, 23 December 2009 (UTC)
- Well I'm a little perplexed now. The majority of her reviews are in registered-user-access-only archives. I can try to cobble together the reviews that aren't, but would it be terribly inappropriate for me to link to the relevant amazon pages, where the reviews are given in total? BKred (talk) 20:56, 23 December 2009 (UTC)
User:Dansack/Society for Values in Higher Education
{{done}} - article is live at Society for Values in Higher Education; further discussion continues later on this page. Dori ❦ (Talk ❖ Contribs ❖ Review) ❦ 03:59, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
I have written my first article, User:Dansack/Society for Values in Higher Education and would welcome reactions. I have included several references which I believe make a good case for its notability. Dansack (talk) 16:49, 24 December 2009 (UTC)
- Sources have to be independent to establish notability. For me, the subject seems notable. The other issue is the tone of the article, sounds little promotional and un-encyclopedic. You need to make it more neutral. Sole Soul (talk) 00:57, 25 December 2009 (UTC)
- Thank you for these comments. I edited the article to remove some of the promotional tone. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Dansack (talk • contribs) 23:15, 18 January 2010 (UTC)
New article on American author
{{done}} - article is live at Connie Ann Kirk. Dori ❦ (Talk ❖ Contribs ❖ Review) ❦ 04:01, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
I've written an article for author Connie Ann Kirk, posted here: [1]. I previously got some feedback to expand on notability within the article and to find more reliable primary sources, which I feel that I have done. I intend to publish, but if there are any glaring issues that I have not noticed, I would appreciate any feedback. Thanks. BKred (talk) 03:27, 28 December 2009 (UTC)
KINDERDANCE INTERNATIONAL, INC.
{{Done}} – ukexpat (talk) 04:35, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
Hi. Could you please advise as what we should delete. All information has been published in Essence and Entrepreneur magazines. I am new at this. Anything you would like us to take out, please let me know if possible. Thank you.
Kind regards, Darlene
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Nuncscio/Kinderdance_International_Inc —Preceding unsigned comment added by Nuncscio (talk • contribs) 19:18, 7 January 2010 (UTC)
- At the moment the tone is a little too promotional and your use of he circle-R is not appropriate - see MOS:TM. Also, to support notability, you will need significant coverage in sources that meet our requirements as to reliability - see WP:RS. Note that directory-type listings are not sufficient, we are looking for coverage in, for example, the press - newspapers etc. Also note that if you are creating the article on behalf of the company, or you are otherwise connected with it, you have a conflict of interest and are strongly advised not to create the article. Hope this helps. – ukexpat (talk) 19:28, 7 January 2010 (UTC)
RONEN GINSBURG
{{Done}} – ukexpat (talk) 04:50, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
--Bucurenciugabriela (talk) 22:33, 7 January 2010 (UTC)
- What needs to be resolved first is whether this person is notable enough for an article. With CEOs, it is important that the company itself should be notable. At the moment, his company doesn't have its own article, although there is an article on the group that it belongs to. Even when a company is notable, the CEO often isn't, although there are of course exceptions for famous CEOs like Steve Jobs. So the most appropriate thing to do is to consider whether there is enough independent coverage of the company to create an article for it. If you do, put some information about the CEO in it - when he took over, his business background, perhaps something about his plans for the company. Best of luck. Itsmejudith (talk) 17:52, 8 January 2010 (UTC)
Igi Aferojn Finitajn (Esperanto version of Getting Things Done)
{{Done}} – ukexpat (talk) 04:50, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
Mi provis traduki la anglan artikolon "Getting Things Done" al Esperanton: User:Jaffamcneill/Igi Aferojn Finitajn
Jim McNeill 11:47, 9 January 2010 (UTC)—Preceding unsigned comment added by Jaffamcneill (talk • contribs)
- Sorry, this is the English Wikipedia and only accepts articles written in English. You should create your article at the Esperanto Wikipedia. – ukexpat (talk) 15:42, 9 January 2010 (UTC)
DoggyRide
{{Done}} – ukexpat (talk) 04:49, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
DoggyRide DoggyRide
MvL 16:20, 10 January 2010 (UTC) —Preceding unsigned comment added by Mattmontare (talk • contribs)
- I think you need some more references to support the notability of the subject matter per WP:PRODUCT; it's also a little spammy in tone. I have tagged appropriately. – ukexpat (talk) 18:33, 11 January 2010 (UTC)
Brenda Jean Patrick
{{Done}} – ukexpat (talk) 04:47, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
This evening, I completed an article that was in a user space (User:Captaincorgi/Brenda Jean Patrick) and moved it to Brenda Jean Patrick. I did so after (1) removing sections of the text that had been questioned by a reviewer; (2) fixing the references using the appropriate Wikipedia format; and (3) adding five links--one related to the subject herself, two to the issue of customer service (within Wikipedia) and two to the issue of customer service in schools.
What will happen next?
Captaincorgi (talk) 02:26, 11 January 2010 (UTC)
Peter Dunn (author)
{{Done}} – ukexpat (talk) 04:46, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
I'd be grateful to have the "new" template removed from this page Peter Dunn (author) on business writer and speaker Peter Dunn, originally created on December 17. (Thanks for the disambiguation tag, added 12/26 after my request.) Many thanks for additional feedback. EFSlattery (talk) 17:56, 12 January 2010 (UTC)
- I have reviewed and removed the tag. I also made some formatting changes, including removing most of the inline external links (per WP:EL) and converting the rest into references. The lead paragraph is also too long - please take a look at WP:LEAD, it should briefly summarise the rest of article, at the moment, it is most of the article. Hope this helps.-ukexpat (talk) 18:58, 12 January 2010 (UTC)
Philip J Day
{{Done}} – ukexpat (talk) 04:46, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
Could I please have feedback relating to this article? It's an article about a director/producer names Philip J Day, I created it using the draft option and then published it directly.
Thank you,
Katie Greenfield —Preceding unsigned comment added by Edgewest (talk • contribs) 22:50, 12 January 2010 (UTC)
- Katie, I have reviewed the article. The biggest problem is with external links - links to sites outside Wikipedia. These should be kept within the guidelines set out at WP:EL and ELs within the body of the article should be avoided where possible. So you will need to strip out all of the external links that you are not using as references (those you can keep and put within <ref></ref> tags). You are however strongly encouraged to link to other pages on Wikipedia where appropriate and to do that you should enclose the title of the page within double square brackets and not use the full external URL. So [[Philip J Day]] rendering as Philip J Day is the proper way whereas [http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Philip_J_Day Philip J Day] rendering as Philip J Day is incorrect. Also, unless the subject deliberately does not punctuate his middle initial, the article should be moved to Philip J. Day. Once we have sorted out the linking issue, we can take another look and see what else needs tweaking. Hope this helps. – ukexpat (talk) 20:36, 15 January 2010 (UTC)
Brian David Smith
{{Done}} – ukexpat (talk) 04:44, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Wickie_Bruce/Brian_David_Smith
I have written a new article about Dr Brian Smith, an innovative thinker and prolific author in the field of Marketing Strategy. I'd appreciate any suggestions and help, especially improving the format, references, links etc. as this is the first article I've written. I also think it would be helpful to upload a couple of pictures - one of Smith and one of "Smith's Wheel" mentioned in the article - but I don't know how. Finally, have I got the references and external links correct?
13:06, 13 January 2010 (UTC)~Wickie Bruce —Preceding unsigned comment added by Wickie Bruce (talk • contribs)
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Wickie_Bruce/Brian_David_Smith
I've written a new article about Dr Brian Smith, an innovative thinker and prolific author in the field of Marketing Strategy. I'd appreciate help in getting it right, in particular formatting, references and external links, as this is my first article. I also have two images that I think would be useful to upload - one is a picture of Smith, another is an image of "Smith's Wheel" that is mentioned in the article.
Help appreciated. Thanks Wickie Bruce (talk) 13:15, 13 January 2010 (UTC) Wickie Bruce 13/Jan/2010
- Have a look at our notability criteria for academics, WP:PROF. Can you identify one of these that Dr Smith meets? If not, then he may not be notable enough for an article (yet). Best of luck. Itsmejudith (talk) 14:04, 15 January 2010 (UTC)
Smith is a Fellow of the Chartered Institute of Marketing and was formerly International Vice Chairman of the Chartered Institute of Marketing. His work has been published in several peer-reviewed journals and is also cited in other academic papers. His research has influenced academic thinking in the field of Strategic Marketing at a number of different academic institutions although he is not employed by any of them. So, I think, it's safe to say Smith is notable in his field.
My next questions are practical - how to amend the article to reflect this? And how to make the article 'live'? --Wickie Bruce (talk) 11:28, 26 January 2010 (UTC) Wickie Bruce
Sparkles the Fire Safety Dog
{{Done}}
Sparkles the Fire Safety Dog: Sparkles the Fire Safety Dog Firefighter Dayna Hilton 15:28, 14 January 2010 (UTC)Dayna Hilton January 14, 2010—Preceding unsigned comment added by Daynark (talk • contribs)
—Preceding unsigned comment added by Daynark (talk • contribs) 15:54, 14 January 2010 (UTC)
For some reason there are references showing up that I did not add. Also, I have looked everywhere to try to figure out how to bullet these references and am still unable to do so. Any guidance would be most appreciated. Dayna HiltonFirefighter Dayna Hilton 16:00, 14 January 2010 (UTC) —Preceding unsigned comment added by Daynark (talk • contribs)
{{Done}} – ukexpat (talk) 04:41, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
I wrote http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:David_Bearman/electronic_records because I found references to 'electronic records' that use the term of art, and other occurences of the term and the term digital records in Wikip[edia that are not using this as a term of art. The distinction, made in the UN Glossary definition, is important I think, but I'm not entirely sure if it warrants an article. I'd appreciate the thoughts of an indewpndent editor:-) David Bearman (talk) 19:50, 14 January 2010 (UTC)David Bearman Jan 14 2010
- I wondered whether the sourced material that you have generated could be used to improve the article Archive. The section Electronic Archiving (should be Electronic archiving with lower case a) is currently unreferenced. Itsmejudith (talk) 15:58, 15 January 2010 (UTC)
Creatine Ethyl Ester Malate Feedback
{{Done}} – ukexpat (talk) 04:38, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
This is an article about Creatine Ethyl Ester Malate. The wiki link is User:Healthycare/Creatine Ethyl Ester Malate I have covered several aspects of the use of this supplement and its general characteristics. The references are included. Any comments will be appreciated. Thanks for your time Healthycare (talk) 10:44, 15 January 2010 (UTC)
- If applicable, structure drawing and an infobox would be good. These links may be helpful Manual of Style, Structure drawing and Chemical infobox. Sole Soul (talk) 12:48, 15 January 2010 (UTC)
IMSA Prototype Lites New Article Needing Feedback
{{Done}} – ukexpat (talk) 04:40, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
I recently created an article on IMSA Prototype Lites and I would like someone to provide feedback on how we can improve the article. This is my first article so I likely made some errors. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Lukesterld (talk • contribs) 16:52, 15 January 2010 (UTC)
Songs For Film & Tv
{{Done}} - speedily deleted – ukexpat (talk) 04:37, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
I just created a site for the company Songs For Film & Tv User:yehu920 and would love some general feedback. Thanks —Preceding unsigned comment added by 98.208.58.176 (talk) 22:10, 15 January 2010 (UTC)
- As stands now it does not indicate how the subject meets the inclusion criteria for comapanies and is in danger of being speedily deleted. – ukexpat (talk) 22:19, 15 January 2010 (UTC)
{{Done}} – ukexpat (talk) 04:33, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
Hi,
This is my first article for Wikipedia and I would be grateful for any general comments.
Also any information about how dry rot is treated outside the UK would be useful as my information sources are rather UK-centric.
EricPolymath (talk) 14:18, 16 January 2010 (UTC)
Don’t bother as this article has been removed!
My request for constructive comments and more information has led to my work being rejected and searches in Wikipedia for information on dry rot being redirected to another much less detailed and, in some places, rather inaccurate, article. There was no attempt at any discussion with me about any improvements that I could make to my article before its removal and no interest has been shown in resolving the situation since.
I find it surprising that, when faced with such arrogance and lack of courtesy by the editors that anyone bothers to write for Wikipedia at all.
EricPolymath (talk) 22:02, 26 January 2010 (UTC)
- Please see my message on your talk page. One other suggestion would be to go to the Dry rot talk page and suggest there how you think that article can be improved with some of your material. I know this can be a frustrating process, but please don't be discouraged. – ukexpat (talk) 22:25, 26 January 2010 (UTC)
- In fact the change of this to a redirect has been reverted, and the article is now at Dry rot treatment. DES (talk) 23:52, 26 January 2010 (UTC)
Discovery Ensemble
{{Done}} – ukexpat (talk) 04:31, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
Hi everyone!!!
I have created a page for a new ensemble in the Boston area, Discovery Ensemble. It has recently been getting A LOT of press from the Boston Globe, the Boston Phoenix, NPR, etc. Please check out this page and make edits accordingly. It's a wonderful ensemble and has an excellent mission as being both a performing orchestra as well as an outreach group. Thanks!
Loveofmusic (talk) 05:17, 17 January 2010 (UTC)
- I have reviewed and made some changes. The main change was removing the biographical stuff which was a little too detailed for an article about the ensemble. I saved the text in a user subpage for you at User:Loveofmusic/biographies. It may be that the individuals are notable enough per WP:BIO and WP:MUSICBIO for their own articles, so that is something to consider. Hope this helps. – ukexpat (talk) 16:22, 17 January 2010 (UTC)
Patrick Joyce, Historian
{{Done}} – ukexpat (talk) 04:30, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
At the request of Patrick Joyce, I entered an article about him which still appears as 'new unreviewed' after one week.
Anne Pennington
(Annepennington (talk) 06:30, 17 January 2010 (UTC))
- Please be patient - we are all volunteers here. I will take a look at it as soon as I can. In the meantime, please read WP:COI. – ukexpat (talk) 16:07, 17 January 2010 (UTC)
- OK, I have reviewed. The subject is undoubtedly notable per WP:PROF, but the article has no references to reliable sources to support claims of notability, so you will need to cite some. Let me know if you need help citing once you have found them. Hope this helps. – ukexpat (talk) 16:34, 17 January 2010 (UTC)
Edward Everett Cox
{{Done}} – ukexpat (talk) 04:29, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
Requesting a review of the Edward Everett Cox article. Cox started Blackford County, Indiana's first daily newspaper, and is considered the county's most influential journalist. He was also heavily involved with the Democratic Party. TwoScars (talk) 14:43, 17 January 2010 (UTC)
Steve Brudniak
{{Done}} - moved to mainspace. – ukexpat (talk) 04:28, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
Hello.
I'm a new Wkipedian looking for help on my first article. The subject is wikilinked as User:Mitlorak/Steve Brudniak.
Thanks,
Tim Carroll January 17, 2010 Mitlorak (talk) 19:18, 17 January 2010 (UTC)
- Tim, I have reviewed. It appears that the subject is notable as required by WP:BIO, but when the article is moved to the mainspace, there maybe questions about that because you have not cited your sources in-line with the text. Take a look at WP:CITE for guidance on that and let me know if you need more help. I also cleaned up the draft a little to bring it into compliance with WP:MOSBIO. I see that the article was previously speedily deleted as being too promotional. I am not an admin so I cannot see the deleted text, but if it is very similar to the current text, it may need to be toned down a little, though it looks pretty neutral to me. – ukexpat (talk) 15:59, 18 January 2010 (UTC)
Self Expression Values
{{Done}} – ukexpat (talk) 04:27, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
Feedback welcomed. thank you! —Preceding unsigned comment added by Serban.tanasa (talk • contribs) 23:03, 17 January 2010 (UTC)
- At the moment this reads like a research paper or essay and not an encyclopedia article. It may also be original research or a synthesis and therefore not appropriate for an article in an encyclopedia. – ukexpat (talk) 01:43, 18 January 2010 (UTC)
RethinkingAutism.com
{{Done}} - deleted as spam and user name blocked. – ukexpat (talk) 04:25, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
Rethinkingautism (talk) 06:04, 19 January 2010 (UTC)Dana Commandaotre User:Rethinkingautism/RethinkingAutism.com
- I don't think the subject meets the criteria of WP:WEB. Try and find some more third party sources to re-assert the notability of the site. -Reconsider! 09:01, 19 January 2010 (UTC)
{{Done}} – ukexpat (talk) 04:24, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
Hi all,
I created and submitted this article about attorney Kathleen Zellner a while back and was hoping somebody could review it and provide feedback for me. Thanks!
Dan
Danturner78 (talk) 07:27, 19 January 2010 (UTC)
- The article as a whole is quite good, however the Awards section may require some addition references and a clean-up. Apart from that, nice work! -Reconsider! 08:51, 19 January 2010 (UTC)
- I agree that the awards section is too long - it needs to be pruned down to a handful at most. I also have issues with the tone of the article - it reads to me like a resumé or something you would find on her firm's website, so it needs to be toned down IMHO and I have tagged it accordingly. – ukexpat (talk) 17:19, 19 January 2010 (UTC)
European Centre for Allergy Research Foundation
{{Done}} – ukexpat (talk) 04:23, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
Hello,
I would like to seek feedback on the article European Centre for Allergy Research Foundation. I wrote the article in the original german version and translated it into english (octobre 2009) since it is a european foundation. If there are any open questions, I would be glad to provide further information. Thank you! Kvmenges (talk) 21:10, 20 January 2010 (UTC)
- At the moment there are no references to reliable sources to show how or why the organisation meets En Wikipedia's inclusion criteria for organisations set out at WP:ORG. It is also a little too promotional in tone. Hope this helps. – ukexpat (talk) 21:43, 20 January 2010 (UTC)
Tobias Sherman
{{Done}} – ukexpat (talk) 04:22, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
Tobias Sherman User:William Pennrod/Tobias Sherman
Please give feedback on my first wikipedia entry as I am doing research on 4 key young Miami socialites and would like to contribute the information to wikipedia.
William Pennrod (talk) 10:21, 21 January 2010 (UTC)
Emil Stanisław Rappaport
{{Done}} – ukexpat (talk) 04:20, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
please review it —Preceding unsigned comment added by SETI3 (talk • contribs) 20:53, 22 January 2010 (UTC)
Kinderdance International, Inc.
{{Done}} - deleted per AFD. – ukexpat (talk) 04:19, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
User:Nuncscio/Kinderdance International Inc —Preceding unsigned comment added by Nuncscio (talk • contribs)
- The company is probably notable, but you only have one reference. You need significant coverage in reliable sources to evidence that notability - I am afraid that coverage in one source is not significant. The tone is also still a little promotional. I see from one of your edit summaries that you may be connected with the company. If so, please read WP:COI - you are strongly advised not to write about subjects where you have a conflict. Hope this helps. – ukexpat (talk) 18:03, 25 January 2010 (UTC)
- See also Wikipedia:Articles for deletion/Kinderdance International Inc. --Orange Mike | Talk 00:43, 26 January 2010 (UTC)
Kemi Omololu-Olunloyo
{{Done}}- deleted per AFD. – ukexpat (talk) 04:17, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Kemi_Omololu-Olunloyo
Pls review for feedback. --AK 02:03, 26 January 2010 (UTC) —Preceding unsigned comment added by Akiomoawo (talk • contribs)
- The intro is rather long, and contains overly large paragraphs. These should be spit or some facts left in the body of the article. Some statements in the intro require citations.
- phrases like "Beating the odds", "notably" "Ironically" do not belong in articles except in cited quotes.
- The article has a good deal of clumsy writing and could be improved by a re-write. DES (talk) 03:12, 26 January 2010 (UTC)
- Given the number of citations and the length of the resulting cite templates in the wiki-text, the use of list defined references might be a good idea. DES (talk) 03:19, 26 January 2010 (UTC)
Let's Adopt
{{Done}} – ukexpat (talk) 04:16, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
I have created the page Let's Adopt, an animal rescue group in Turkey, and I don't want it to get deleted for not living up to Wiki's notability standards. I would really appreciate a second opinion. Thanks. Retinue (talk) 09:38, 26 January 2010 (UTC)
- Actual link User:Retinue/Let's Adopt!. DES (talk) 16:16, 26 January 2010 (UTC)
- There could be a good article here, but there are several problems. Most of the sources cited are in Turkish, naturally enough for an article about a grass-roots organization in Turkey. However, if you can supply translations (or better link to translated versions if available) it would enable English-speaking readers (this is the English-language Wikipedia) to see what the source says. The citation templates {{Cite news}} and {{cite web}} have parameters for translated quotes.
- The citations of http://www.europarl.europa.eu/sides/getDoc.do?pubRef=-//EP//TEXT+WQ+E-2009-0135+0+DOC+XML+V0//EN and http://www.todayszaman.com/tz-web/detaylar.do?load=detay&link=154796&bolum=100 to support the sentence "he group also organizes protests and campaigns against some city and district municipalities that are frequently accused of poisoning stray animals or abandoning them in woodlands to starve[10] and other alleged violations of Turkey’s animal welfare legislation[11]." are incorrect, as neither source mentions the group "Let's Adopt", although they are about the general controversy on animal rights and the killing of dogs in Turkey.
- The phrase "in an embarrassing failure to pick up on a reference to the '80s comic" should not be part of the general article text: it is not for Wikipedia to say what was or was not "embarrassing". This seems to be a very close paraphrase of the news story at http://www.todayszaman.com/tz-web/detaylar.do?load=detay&link=178002 which said "... completely failing to pick up on a reference to the '80s comic ...". It would be better to quote the story exactly and attribute the quote. "embarrassing" should not be used unless there is a source which can be cited that used the term.
- The phrase "made the front page of even some of the highest circulation dailies in the country" is awkward (IMO) and implies an opnion, how about "was discussed on the front pages of several of Turkey's major daily papers" instead?
- The article as written seems rather promotional, please remember to respect the neutral point of view.
- If you are a member of the group "Let's Adopt", please read our conflict of interest guideline -- writing about subjects one is too closely involved with is discouraged and must be done with care if at all, because it is very hard to be neutral about such subjects.
- I hope this is helpful. DES (talk) 16:42, 26 January 2010 (UTC)
The Bombing of Braunschweig (Brunswick) Oct. 1944
{{Done}} – ukexpat (talk) 04:14, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
WIKIPEDIA To whom it may concern:
I am a naturalized (1962) US citizen. A veteran of the USAF 1962-1965. I have a BA from UCLA in German 1969, and an MA from UCLA 1972 Theater Arts, major in TV and Radio.
I was born in Braunschweig, Niedersachsen (Lower Saxony) in 1940. To realize that those who cared for me as a baby, saved me through one of the greatest bombings in/of WWII, both by British and US bombers, comes both as shock and utter amazement to me.
I would be interested in adding a written addendum (essay) to the above headline. Sort of a "baby-infant" viewpoint of my very first memories of life of someone who was born in Braunschweig 4 years before the "Bombing of Braunschweig Oct. 1944."
Would Wikipedia be interested in my POV (point of view), of such an essay as addendum to the above headline; or just the British and US military records of that bombing?
If Wkipedia is interested in my POV essay, please instruct me in how and where to send my written work, please contact me here:
email removed, see history
Thank you,
Eric Gordon
Tuesday, January 26th, 2010 —Preceding unsigned comment added by 67.35.156.52 (talk) 00:41, 27 January 2010 (UTC)
- I am afraid that such an essay is relay not appropriate for Wikipedia, see our Neutral Point of View policy. Essays in userspace need not have an NPOV, but are supposed to be about how to build or run the encyclopedia. See Wikipedia is not a free webhost.
- Such an essay would perhaps be a wonderful tribute, but you should post it on your own website, or on one of the many public fora that permit anyone to post onion.
- And I might add it is a very poor idea to post your email address to Wikipedia talk pages. Such pages are indexed by Google, and email addresses posted here tend to get massive spam. And normally no one responds off-wiki except in cases where privacy is an issue or there is some other very unusual situation. in this case I am going to send you a copy of this by email. but normally i would not do so. DES (talk) 00:53, 27 January 2010 (UTC)
- See Bombing of Braunschweig in World War II. DES (talk) 00:54, 27 January 2010 (UTC)
Warrington Colescott
{{Done}} – ukexpat (talk) 04:12, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
New article about American printmaker Warrington Colescott. I would like to have it reviewed so we can remove the tag "this is an unreviewed article." Thank you for your time and input.
Barcham (talk) 16:13, 27 January 2010 (UTC)
- I have reviewed it and removed the tag. Overall a good start on an article. There are a number of places where statements of fact are made without citation, and a number of others where opinions (generally critical evaluations) are stated as fact without supporting citations. See my comments at Talk:Warrington Colescott, and these edits. DES (talk) 19:55, 27 January 2010 (UTC)
Gapers_Block
{{Done}} - reviewed and in mainspace. – ukexpat (talk) 04:11, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
Gapers_Block
Chicagopedia60657 (talk) 23:25, 27 January 2010 (UTC)
Canon Ezra Baya Lawiri
{{Done}} – ukexpat (talk) 04:09, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
Would someone have a look at this new article about Canon Ezra Baya Lawiri so that the 'new article' tag can be removed. Many thanks Richard Avery (talk) 17:27, 28 January 2010 (UTC)
- Nice work! The article has been reviewed and moved to Ezra Baya Lawiri (per naming conventions, we don't use people's titles in the title of the article). Article issues tags have been added, but I am not sure that I agree with all of them. I also created a named reference for one ref that was used a few times and put the others into {{Cite web}} format. I will also add some project templates to the talk page. – ukexpat (talk) 17:35, 1 February 2010 (UTC)
Suitable content for new page
{{Done}} - article deleted (again). – ukexpat (talk) 04:07, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Talk:James_Duke_Mason
An administrator told me on that page to create my desired content in my "user space" and then "ask at the Help Desk for comment as to suitability". That is what I am doing now. This is what I would like my desired content to look like:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:C4162/James_Duke_Mason
Please consider my request. If you approve, I will, as the administrator told me to, "use WP:RM to get it moved OR". And don't even try to use the argument that he's only notable because of his parents and therefore can't be included on Wikipedia. Look at Frances Bean Cobain's page- she got no accomplishments whatsoever, and yet is also included on Wikipedia.
- I'm afraid I will have to use that argument, see also WP:OTHERSTUFF about one of the arguments you should avoid in deletion discussions. Sole Soul (talk) 23:24, 31 January 2010 (UTC)
- User:C4162, based on the number of times this article has been listed here in the last week (1, 2, 3), it appears you don't like the feedback you've received (such as this response). But you have to admit that what you've been told has been consistent: there just isn't a sufficient basis shown to consider him notable. Yet.
- It's the same reason the article has been deleted so many times in the past (eight under this name + two more here + two AFDs).
- Deleting feedback isn't the answer. I suggest patience—come back and try again after one of his movies has been released, maybe. Dori ❦ (Talk ❖ Contribs ❖ Review) ❦ 07:42, 1 February 2010 (UTC)
As I posted before, and which you deleted:
- I don't see where it is any more notable than the previous
twoeight deletions. Jay Arnold is an unknown director, there is no information on the film, nor the depth of the role of Mason, and no reliable sources. Other than being the child of notable people, there is nothing there that would warrant Mason's inclusion in Wikipedia.
Deleting the feedback does not make it go away, it is accessible to anyone that wants to look for it - it just hurts your argument for inclusion. (GregJackP (talk) 15:19, 1 February 2010 (UTC))
Object Oriented Quality Management (OQM)
{{done}} - article is now at AFD. Dori ❦ (Talk ❖ Contribs ❖ Review) ❦ 03:37, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Object_Oriented_Quality_Management_(OQM) Please review my new article.Pndt (talk) 21:30, 1 February 2010 (UTC)
- I've tried wikifying Object Oriented Quality Management (OQM), but I wasn't able to find any third-party verifiable reliable sources that used the phrase. Without those, I suspect that your article is headed for deletion. I tagged it with what I think are its main issues; if you want it to stick around, I recommend that you find a way to fix them. Dori ❦ (Talk ❖ Contribs ❖ Review) ❦ 03:35, 2 February 2010 (UTC)
- And I moved it to Object Oriented Quality Management per the naming conventions. – ukexpat (talk) 03:41, 2 February 2010 (UTC)
Brand Clarity
{{done}} - article was deleted as advertising. Dori ❦ (Talk ❖ Contribs ❖ Review) ❦ 03:39, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
--Ujjawal Bagaria (talk) 13:28, 2 February 2010 (UTC)
Transpo Industries, Inc.
{{done}} - article was deleted as it didn't say why the company was notable. Dori ❦ (Talk ❖ Contribs ❖ Review) ❦ 03:41, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
I've created a page about a corporation. I plan on submitting more articles in the field of 'transportation safety' corporations, due to the lack of information on the subject.
Transpo Industries, Inc. Ryxhd123 (talk) 13:58, 2 February 2010 (UTC)
Oil Nut Bay
{{done}} - article was deleted for being purely promotional. Dori ❦ (Talk ❖ Contribs ❖ Review) ❦ 03:43, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
The article is Oil Nut Bay - it was posted a couple weeks ago and has not yet been reviewed. It is my first Wikipedia entry, and I believe it meets all the correct criteria, but could use some feedback on formatting, etc. I've tried doing this once before for something else and the article was deleted. Want to make sure I am on the right track before I attempt and additional articles.
Thanks in advance!JordanBlakesley (talk) 18:12, 2 February 2010 (UTC)
- I've made a few changes, mainly formatting and added some tags, I am primarily concerned about notability and tone, see what you think, happy to help with any questions. Paste Let’s have a chat. 18:31, 2 February 2010 (UTC)
- You don't happen to be the Jordan Blakesley who works for Turner PR, PR agency for Oil Nut Bay, do you? If so, please read WP:COI and WP:SPAM and stop spamming Wikipedia on behalf of your clients. – ukexpat (talk) 21:15, 3 February 2010 (UTC)
Object Oriented Quality Management (OQM)
{{done}} - see above. Dori ❦ (Talk ❖ Contribs ❖ Review) ❦ 03:38, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
Please review my new article on Object Oriented Quality Management. Object Oriented Quality Management (OQM) Peter van Nederpelt, the Netherlands Pndt (talk) 21:58, 2 February 2010 (UTC)
Get Out of Our House
{{done}} - article deleted as it didn't explain why the organization was notable. Dori ❦ (Talk ❖ Contribs ❖ Review) ❦ 03:44, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
This grass roots political party seems to be growing quickly and sounds like it has some credible ideas that could appeal to a majority of Americans who feel that things are totally out of control in Washington. There are plenty of references in the national media. I invite scrutiny of this organization as I believe sunlight is the best disinfectant. That is why I hope I can encourage some credible feedback. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Minitman (talk • contribs) 04:05, 3 February 2010 (UTC)
- Please take a look at the notability guidelines for organizations at WP:ORG. At the moment the article does not indicate how or why the organization meets those guidelines. You will need to cite significant coverage in reliable sources. – ukexpat (talk) 04:14, 3 February 2010 (UTC)
- You have added references to the article but they need to be cited against text in the article. Please take a look at WP:FOOTNOTES and WP:CITE. – ukexpat (talk) 21:21, 3 February 2010 (UTC)
Cornered! (film)
{{done}} - article deleted as copyright infringement. Dori ❦ (Talk ❖ Contribs ❖ Review) ❦ 03:45, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
Hello,
I'm seeking feedback on my article about a movie. The article is called : Cornered! (film) wikilink is Cornered! (film)
Thanks for your time & patience on this, my first article! TomStaels (talk) 10:51, 3 February 2010 (UTC)
Ryan Scott Oliver
{{done}} - article is off to a good start. Dori ❦ (Talk ❖ Contribs ❖ Review) ❦ 03:46, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
I was surprised to find that he didn't have a wikipedia page so I created one for him. I've edited pages before but this is my first full page. Thanks for the help.
ThePhancake (talk) 02:13, 4 February 2010 (UTC)
Henri Kessler
{{done}} article deleted as copyvio (in addition to the COI. Dori ❦ (Talk ❖ Contribs ❖ Review) ❦ 03:47, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
Henri Kessler is the name of my article. I would love some feedback as to how much more information I need in order to post it live. Thank you!
Best,
Asst henri kessler (talk) 02:00, 5 February 2010 (UTC)Carolina Filgueiras February 4th 2010
Actually, the article you created was named User:Asst henri kessler/new article name here; and it has been deleted as an obvious copyright violation. Additionally, if (as your username suggests) you work for Kessler, you should not be creating or editing any articles about him or his business(es) due to the obvious conflict of interest. --Orange Mike | Talk 01:14, 6 February 2010 (UTC)
Núria Añó
{{Done}} - in mainspace and reviewed.
I added my first article about User:Emperson/Núria Añó but since days the page it a new unreviewed article. Leave feedback if possible, thanks Emperson (talk) 12:34, 3 February 2010 (UTC)
- Good start, however the article is in need of references in order to substantiate the detail. -Reconsider! 01:38, 4 February 2010 (UTC)
National_Collection_of_Yeast_Cultures_(NCYC)
{{Done}} - now in mainspace and reviewed. – ukexpat (talk) 03:30, 10 February 2010 (UTC)
User:Brawlad/National_Collection_of_Yeast_Cultures_(NCYC) It's my first article and I'm looking for some helpful feedback. Thanks. Brawlad (talk) 21:56, 3 February 2010 (UTC)
Seeking further guidance re draft article: Society for Values in Higher Education
{{Done}} – ukexpat (talk) 03:19, 10 February 2010 (UTC)
Greetings. In December I created a workspace article about an organization called the Society for Values in Higher Education. I got some comments on it and made some revisions. I'd like to take it live, but would welcome any final comments before doing so. It is at http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Dansack/Society_for_Values_in_Higher_Education Thank you Dansack (talk) 00:17, 6 February 2010 (UTC)
- It's now live (at Society for Values in Higher Education) but it still needs work. A source cannot be the sole reference for statements about itself, which means that most of the article is considered unsourced. In addition, the article doesn't say why the group is notable—what makes it important? Why have people unaffiliated with the group written about it? The answers to those questions need to be part of the article. Dori ❦ (Talk ❖ Contribs ❖ Review) ❦ 02:35, 6 February 2010 (UTC)
Thank you for making it live. The entire historical section is supported by references from reputable outside sources. I believe that this history, and the list of current and former members, makes it notable.Dansack (talk) 17:51, 6 February 2010 (UTC)
New Biography Article
{{Done}} - article deleted per AFD here. – ukexpat (talk) 03:14, 10 February 2010 (UTC)
Hi. I have rewritten the article about Lindsay rosenwald and would appreciate your feedback. This article is pending removal, but I think that it is worth staying here. I am going to add content about the Paramount Group companies, too. Look forward to your feedback. Thank you. J.D. (talk) 09:27, 8 February 2010 (UTC)
The Non
{{Done}} - article speedily deleted. – ukexpat (talk) 04:52, 10 February 2010 (UTC)
I just created a new article about an upcoming band, The Non, and I would like any suggestions to make it better and fuller. I have carefully written it to hold a neutral tone. An article for this band, which only listed the members was originally deleted several years ago before their first album release, but since then they have grown into a more recognized band. Amyebutler (talk) 22:54, 16 January 2010 (UTC)
- It is still not clear that the subject meets the notability guidelines set out at WP:BAND. – ukexpat (talk) 02:34, 17 January 2010 (UTC)
- I thought the multiple non-trivial published works would establish the notability of the artist. I have referenced The Edmond Sun, OU Daily, Norman Transcript, and a blog written by a professor at The Academy of Contemporary Music at the University of Central Oklahoma and DJ for The Oklahoma Rock Show 105.3 The Spy. The only of those that may be considered trivial are the OU Daily, but as stated in the guidelines those are considered on a case-by-case basis. They have been covered in more in the past, but they are not all archived online. I appreciate the feedback, but do you have advice for proving their notability further? Amyebutler (talk) 03:07, 17 January 2010 (UTC)
- Blogs do not usually qualify as reliable sources. So your first two are OK, the third - notice of a launch party - is trivial and the fourth probably not reliable. However, sources do not have to be online to be reliable. As long as they can be verified by someone interested in doing so, offline sources are perfectly ok and we have a template for them - {{Cite news}} (we also have {{Cite web}} if you are interested in precise formatting of online references). So I would cite some offline sources if you have them. Hope this helps. – ukexpat (talk) 03:16, 17 January 2010 (UTC)
James R. Lyons, M.D.
{{Done}} - article now in mainspace and reviewed. – ukexpat (talk) 04:49, 10 February 2010 (UTC)
Would welcome feedback on article as follows: User:BritNSmithy/James_R._Lyons,_M.D..
BritNSmithy (talk) 02:10, 20 January 2010 (UTC)BritNSmithy, 1/19/2010
Would welcome feedback on article as follows: James R. Lyons, M.D.
BritNSmithy (talk) 02:13, 20 January 2010 (UTC)BritNSmithy, 1/19/2010
- Hi; I combined your two requests into one section; I'm guessing you were trying to fix the red link. If so, here's the correct link: User:BritNSmithy/James R. Lyons, M.D. I'll take a look at it. Liquidluck✽talk 04:04, 20 January 2010 (UTC)
Jackson Hole Conservation Alliance
{{Done}} – ukexpat (talk) 04:24, 10 February 2010 (UTC)
I am requesting a review of my proposed page on the User:JHCAOutreach/Jackson Hole Conservation Alliance
Thank you! JHCAOutreach (talk) 18:36, 1 February 2010 (UTC)
- There are some layout problems, but the bigger issue is that it reads like an advertisement in violation of WP:Spam. I suspect from your user name that you are connected with the organisation. That puts you in a conflict of interest and you are strongly discouraged from creating articles or editing them where you have a conflict, because it is very hard to maintain an neutral point of view when you have a COI. So before this is moved to the mainspace it will need toning down and the promotional stuff removed. Hope this helps. – ukexpat (talk) 18:58, 1 February 2010 (UTC)
Naomi Clark
{{Done}} – ukexpat (talk) 04:22, 10 February 2010 (UTC)
Naomi Clark. This is an Arts article that I've spent some time developing. The feedback would be appreciated. Thanks. -- James26 (talk) 04:33, 2 February 2010 (UTC)
Joseph Graves Olney alias "Joe Hill"
{{Done}} - article reviewed. – ukexpat (talk) 04:21, 10 February 2010 (UTC)
Joseph Graves Olney alias "Joe Hill"
````ratmuffin 2/2/10
I am writing this article to be linked to the John Ringo article where Joe Hill is mentioned —Preceding unsigned comment added by Ratmuffin (talk • contribs) 03:53, 3 February 2010 (UTC)
Dominion Colour Corporation
{{done}} - article has been deleted. Dori ❦ (Talk ❖ Contribs ❖ Review) ❦ 19:51, 11 February 2010 (UTC)
Dominion Colour Corporation (Kanjani 13:11, 10 February 2010 (UTC)) —Preceding unsigned comment added by Kanjani (talk • contribs)
- The article has no references and doesn't explain why the company is notable. Between the two, I've put it up for speedy deletion. Dori ❦ (Talk ❖ Contribs ❖ Review) ❦ 00:18, 11 February 2010 (UTC)
ProductCamp
{{done}} - article was prod'd by User:Orangemike and deleted by User:Jclemens. Dori ❦ (Talk ❖ Contribs ❖ Review) ❦ 07:11, 13 February 2010 (UTC)
ProductCamp Jelgie (talk) 20:34, 30 January 2010 (UTC)
- I just made a pass at it, but it could still use more help. The main problem is that the term "ProductCamp" has no Google News hits. I've done what I can, but someone may still put it up for deletion. That many marketers involved, and they can't a media outlet to cover it??
Dori ❦ (Talk ❖ Contribs ❖ Review) ❦ 02:12, 31 January 2010 (UTC)
John Steinbruck
{{Done}}
John Steinbruck Looking for general feedback and assistance in better formatting of pictures--Mjeinpenn (talk) 21:20, 13 February 2010 (UTC)
- Impressive start for a new editor. Check out WP:IMAGES for help incorporating your images into the article.--SPhilbrickT 03:23, 14 February 2010 (UTC)
- Might need to do some structural changes and review the list of external links. -Reconsider! 06:48, 14 February 2010 (UTC)
User:Mistermarshall/paulsmith
{{Done}} - moved to mainspace and reviewed. - ukexpat (talk) 22:45, 14 February 2010 (UTC)
User:Mistermarshall/paulsmith
Hello, this is my first attempt at creating a wiki-page.
I'm happy with the content, but I'm not sure how to go about publishing it? I haven't made enough edits to self-publish, but I don't quite understand the instructions on submitting it for publishing.
If somebody could help, it would be appreciated. Thanks!
Mistermarshall (talk) 18:07, 13 February 2010 (UTC)
- You should be able to do this yourself. It looks quite good for a first attempt, I don't see any obvious needs for improvement. All you need to do is WP:MOVE it to a logical title. I'd suggest Paul Smith(writer).--SPhilbrickT 03:13, 14 February 2010 (UTC)