The Joy Luck Club (film) edit
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This article is graded a B-class, and I'm planning to nominate it as a Good Article. I also want to make it a Featured-quality article, but I guess a lot is demanded. Any suggestions to make it a Good or Featured Article?
Thanks, George Ho (talk) 21:35, 18 September 2013 (UTC)
- Hi George. I saw this PR request languishing and thought I'd jump in. I should be able to add my comments over the next day or so. Thanks, Ruby 2010/2013 05:23, 2 October 2013 (UTC)
- Comments
- I would review WP:MOSFILM for film article guidelines (I've found it useful when expanded some of my film articles, such as Sense and Sensibility)
- The plot section seems a bit on the long side; is there anything extraneous that could be cut?
- Cut out the irrelevant, yet poignant scene of re-telling and swan feather. --George Ho (talk) 16:32, 3 October 2013 (UTC)
- MOS:FILM says that there is no recommended limit if a plot is too complex. As you see, mothers' and daughters' stories are different from each other. Skimming them down is too detrimental to readers. --George Ho (talk) 16:31, 5 October 2013 (UTC)
- The article could use a good copy edit, particularly in the plot section
- The lead is too short; more content should be added about its release and reception, for example
- Many of your sources need accessdates
- I notice a dependence on newspaper and magazine articles; I found some useful links in Google Books that might help with your expansion: [1] [2] [3] [4]
I am pleased with the time and energy you have invested in this article (especially when compared to its previous state)! Hopefully these comments help with its further improvement. Ruby 2010/2013 04:14, 3 October 2013 (UTC)