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Sarracenia edit

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I've listed this article for peer review because the article is listed as A-class under Wikiproject Carnivorous plants and I would like input as to how we can prepare it for featured article candidacy.

Thanks, SunDragon34 (talk) 02:04, 18 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Ealdgyth (talk · contribs)

  • You said you wanted to know what to work on before taking to FAC, so I looked at the sourcing and referencing with that in mind. I reviewed the article's sources as I would at FAC. The sourcing looks good.
Hope this helps. Please note that I don't watchlist Peer Reviews I've done. If you have a question about something, you'll have to drop a note on my talk page to get my attention. (My watchlist is already WAY too long, adding peer reviews would make things much worse.) 13:59, 24 August 2008 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: Very briefly, here are some suggestions for improvement. If you want more comments, please ask here.

  • Would it make sense in the lead to also give the common names of the closely related genera? Perhaps something like ... closely allied genera Darlingtonia (Cobra Lily) and Heliamphora (Marsh Pitcher Plants). Not everyone knows the scientific names
  • Could the figure show all five zones?
  • Per WP:MOS#Images, images should be set to thumb width to allow reader preferences to take over. For portrait format images, "upright" can be used to make the image narrower. Also do not sanwich text between two images, and avoid left justified images right under headers.
  • References need to be cleaned up a little, ISBN is repeated twice in ref 11, or Accessed online: 4 December 2007. vs. retrieved 17 May 2006 at 15:53. Using {{cite web}} or other cite templates might help.

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 03:56, 25 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]