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Order For Merit to the Fatherland edit

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I've listed this article for peer review because I have recently created over 20 other phalerisitcs related articles and am in the process of creating over 50 more in the next weeks. Feedback in the form of constructive criticism would be appreciated as I am relatively new at this. It would also prevent too many future corrections should I be doing something wrong. Cheers!

Thanks, Fdutil (talk) 03:44, 3 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Sort of depends what you hope to achieve with these kinds of article. Is it a GA or an FL or just a decent B-class article?
The lead is too short. It should summarise the whole article.
" re establishment " needs a hyphen.
"honorary title" is a disambiguation link so needs to be made more specific.
"The Order "For Merit to the Fatherland" is a mixed civilian and military order" -> "The Order For Merit to the Fatherland is awarded to both civilians and members of the military."
"These classes are awarded sequentially from the IV to the I class. " seems unnecessary.
"Order For Service to the Fatherland IV" Service or Merit?
24mm, 40mm, convert to Imperial for our US and Brit readers.
Don't put spaces between punctuation and references.
Partial list of recipients is a partial gallery. You could make a table including these images and dates of award, reasons etc.
Heading : Award Description is unnecessarily over-captitalised, should just be Award description. Check others.

The Rambling Man (talk) 18:40, 8 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]