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Missing My Baby edit

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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to bring the article to FAC. It already passed GA so I hope to achieve my first FA article

Thanks, Jona yo! ^{Selena 4 ever} 01:10, 21 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Lead is possibly a little too long, see WP:LEAD, I would imagine just two paras to summarise an article of this size.
- Fixed Jona yo! ^{Selena 4 ever} 22:46, 4 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
No images available?
- It was not a single. Best, Jonayo! ^{Selena 4 ever} 22:46, 4 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  - No but any kind of free image available to brighten it up? The Rambling Man (talk) 17:55, 5 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"to help her crossover attempt." crossover to what?
- Fixed Jona yo! ^{Selena 4 ever} 22:46, 4 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"mid-tempo" just linking tempo looks odd here.
- Fixed Jona yo! ^{Selena 4 ever} 22:46, 4 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
" influences of urban and soul music" not of, from. or "is influenced by urban..."
- Fixed Jona yo! ^{Selena 4 ever} 22:46, 4 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"Selena had used these techniques to emphasize the song's title and its central theme." no need for "had".
- Fixed Jona yo! ^{Selena 4 ever} 22:46, 4 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"The lyrics are about the love felt " -> "The lyrics describe the love..."
- Fixed Jona yo! ^{Selena 4 ever} 22:46, 4 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
As usual, I'd suggest a quick copyedit from someone who can do it much better than me.
- Done Jona yo! ^{Selena 4 ever} 22:46, 4 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Use same name in infobox for Quintilla as writer and producer.
- What do you mean? Jonayo! ^{Selena 4 ever} 22:46, 4 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  - As a writer you have his full name and as a producer just his surname. I know it's odd but in info boxes we do tend to repeat full names. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:55, 5 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
""Missing My Baby" was written by Selena y Los Dinos backup singer Pete Astudillo and produced by Selena's brother and principal record producer A.B. Quintanilla III." almost verbatim copy of the lead. Try to mix it up a little.
- Fixed Jona yo! ^{Selena 4 ever} 22:46, 4 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Why have a single row table sortable?
What do you mean? Jonayo! ^{Selena 4 ever} 22:46, 4 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- - The table which has one row is sortable. It's pointless having it as "sortable". The Rambling Man (talk) 17:55, 5 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"Full Force - backing vocalists" en-dash.
- Fixed Jona yo! ^{Selena 4 ever} 22:46, 4 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Ref 2 needs a sub, ref 3 doesn't but is a very similar source, really?
- I don't see the difference, the only thing is the year (1993) and the editor Burr, Ramiro. Best, Jonayo! ^{Selena 4 ever} 22:46, 4 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  - Please link things the first time, not the second, e.g. Austin American-Statesman. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:55, 5 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Ref titles should comply with WP:DASH ie. spaced en-dash, not hyphen.
- Fixed Jona yo! ^{Selena 4 ever} 22:46, 4 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Denver Post is The Denver Post.
- Fixed Jona yo! ^{Selena 4 ever} 22:46, 4 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Check other publication names.
- Fixed Jona yo! ^{Selena 4 ever} 22:46, 4 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

The Rambling Man (talk) 17:43, 3 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I have

Fixed most issues, mind a second look? Best, Jona yo! ^{Selena 4 ever} 22:46, 4 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]