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I've listed this article for peer review because I want to bring this article to GA status. As I am familiar with American English, I would like someone to check if this article was done in New Zealand English or not (as Lorde is a New Zealander).
Much appreciated, Simon (talk) 14:39, 9 September 2014 (UTC)
Comments from SNUGGUMS
Before taking this to GAN, here's some comments.....
- Lead
- Her musical content doesn't really need to be described here, should just be in body.
- "Lorde's music are styled in the subgenres of"..... reads awkwardly, try "Lorde's music consists of"
- "typical teen" seems rather biased
- Life and career
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- Early life and career beginnings
- Artistry
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- Musical style
- Personal life and Image
- The first paragraph contains so little detail that it's probably best incorporated into her "life and career" section, and rename this section "Public Image".
- "From late 2013"..... In
- Since this does not mention or even make references to Rihanna explictly, you should include the referral link as well if giving detail on her.
- "She explains her disdain towards women wearing sexy lingerie and opining that"..... has expressed disdain, replace "and" with a comma, "sexy" is POV
- "despite the fact she is too young to vote" → "despite not being eligible to vote"
- "The American singer" is unneeded in "The American singer Britney Spears named Lorde"
- Awards and nominations
- This section right now is entirely blank aside from a referral link. Write a paragraph or two talking about her major achievements like Grammy Awards and MTV Video Music Awards, perhaps some detail on her commercial success as well.
Overall, not a bad article. Snuggums (talk / edits) 06:27, 11 September 2014 (UTC)