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I've listed this article for peer review because I am planning to submit it as a Featured Article candidate and would like to get suggestions for getting it to meet the criteria for Featured Articles.

Thanks, Pseudo-Richard (talk) 07:58, 14 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

"...of the most anti-Semitic films ..." why the capital S and hyphen? Opening sentence used "antisemitic", be internally consistent.
I would link Terra Filmkunst because it's not clear to non-experts that this is a company, not an individual.
Consider linking Reichsmark.
"Susan Tegel[who?]" needs to be resolved, I'm guessing it's a case of "who is she and why should her opinion be important?"
Consider linking Diet (assembly).
"As his carriage gets into an accident" not particularly elegant. "As his carriage is involved in an accident" perhaps?
"Duke's bodyguard, opera and ballet as well" the Duke's opera? the Duke's ballet?
"but also causing " -> "but causes"
"of Duke Karl Alexander of Württemberg in Stuttgart. As a financial advisor for Duke Karl Alexander, Duke of Württemberg, he " repetitive and overlinked.
"Court Jew" or "court Jew", and link only the first instance.
"which he refused to do" just "which he refused" is sufficient.
"the Nazi takeover" of where?
"Goebbels was insisting in" Goebbels insisted in.
Link pogrom.
"against the Jews. [21][22] " remove the space before the refs.
No link for Central Rio?
"the lead role of Joseph Süß Oppenheimer included the title role " lead role... title role...
René Deltgen has a diacritic.
Why are Final solution and Jewish question in italics?
If possible, try to avoid squashing text between images.
Several short paragraphs, try merging them for a more appealing appearance and flow.
"The film is available for sale on VHS from Facets" presumably not everywhere though.
Whitespace before the Analysis section.
"List of German films 1933-1945" needs an en-dash in that year range.
Avoid SHOUTING in the ref titles.
If you use a source more than twice, make it a general reference and then you can just cite the author name and page number rather than repeat the title, ISBN etc etc each and every time.
Ref 111 has no access date, publisher etc.
New York Times is The New York Times. Also that ref has different date format.
Ref 115 is Spiegelonline but has no link, and has different format date from other refs.

The Rambling Man (talk) 08:10, 3 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]