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Angela Lansbury

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I've listed this article for peer review because this actress is admired and well-known in the theatre community. Many accounts have been written about her career and life that can be accessed for information and used in this article. Furthermore, upon steady improvement, it can serve as an exemplar whose approach may be emulated in articles in the same or a similar category.

Thanks, —Major Seventh (talk) 19:37, 13 October 2009 (UTC)

Comments by Dana boomer

Overall, this article looks well written. The largest problem (at least for moving the article to a GA or a FA review) is the lack of references. Here are my comments:

• The lead could stand to be expanded to three longer paragraphs. It should be a summary of the article, without including new information.
• There are a lot of one and two sentence paragraphs, especially in the Personal life section.
• As I stated earlier, the major problem with this article is the lack of in-line references. For example, the sentence "It became one of the longest-running detective drama series in television history and made her one of the highest paid actresses in the world." (in the Film and television section, picked at random from the article) is just one sentence that needs a citation, for the "longest-running" part and the "highest paid" part. There are many other sections and paragraphs in the article that are partially or completely unsourced.
• It might be worth considering to transfer the Work and Awards and nominations sections into separate sub-articles, and instead having short prose summaries of her most important work and most important awards. This isn't a major concern, but as I said, something worth considering.
• Web references should include the title, publisher and an access date at the very least.
• Ref #1 (Discover Tower Hamlets...) is a dead link.
• What makes Playbill.com a reliable reference?
• Ref #6 (Interview with Angela Lansbury...) dead links.
• I see you have one biography about Lansbury listed in the References section, although it is not used in any in-line references. However, I don't see any other works that are specifically on Lansbury, such as:
  • Angela Lansbury: A Biography
  • Angela Lansbury: A Life on Stage and Screen
• What about a mention of Lansbury's book? There may be others:
  • Angela Lansbury's positive moves : my personal plan for fitness and well-being

I hope these comments help. I know the above seems like a pretty serious list, but overall the article is really nice. I'll be watchlisting this page, so if you have any questions, please feel free to ask me here. My talk page is also always open. Dana boomer (talk) 22:55, 22 October 2009 (UTC)

Comments by Wildhartlivie

I actually don't think the body of work tables need to be spun off, however they do need to be reworked to incorporate roles and the awards listed below them. I am quite willing to work on that to meet the recommended table styles per WP:ACTOR and will do that. I also removed the "See also" section because they were both very general links that are not relevant to the life and career of Lansbury (category 1925 births and List of British actresses). I also added the "Template group" box to collapse the awards navigation boxes at the bottom of the page.

• The lead needs to be expanded to adequately summarize the article per WP:LEAD.
• The references need to use a consistent style - either
• There are two disambiguation pages that are linked in the article that need to lead to a definitive article ([1]).
• All of the images should be free-use only and all need to have alt text added.
• All of the images should have {{personality rights}} templates added to the commons image page.
• I think besides the inline citations mentioned by Dana boomer, the article could use a good copy edit. I note one sentence paragraphs (one that encompasses 3 lines of type) and a number of run-on sentences.
• I believe that the incorporation of some critical reviews for her work would enhance the career section.
• The biography should be listed in a "Further reading" section rather than in references unless it is used.

Please let me know if you need any other help on this article. Wildhartlivie (talk) 06:54, 23 October 2009 (UTC)