Wikipedia:Peer review/Aikido/archive1

Aikido edit

I would like this article peer reviewed with an eye to making it either Featured Article or A-class. There has been an ongoing effort to improve the quality and provide a balanced look on a martial art which not only has a broad following but quite a variation in how it is practiced.Peter Rehse 04:45, 1 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]

It looks pretty good to me. I just have a few brief comments:
  • The introduction could do with expansion so it briefly covers the main points of the article.
  • The page could use some more citations, particularly in those sections that currently lack any.
  • I believe that aikido techniques are taught to a number of police departments, but this is not mentioned. It would be good to include this and to provide some information about why this is a favored technique of police officers.
  • Some coverage of safe practices and potential injuries would be beneficial.
Thanks. — RJH (talk) 19:30, 2 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Most of the comments have been taken to heart over the past month and a half - I will submit the article for Featured Article review in one week.

  • The introduction has been expanded - adequetly I think.
  • Citations have been added - basically I think there are enough now but more are always welcome.
  • Although true about the police departments this is a difficult thing to incorporate and adequetly cite. It seems every martial art claims to teach SWAT, elite military units, etc. Yes some aikido techniques are taught to police but those techniques are not necessarily unique to Aikido. Yoshinkan Aikido headquarters teaches a year long course to the Tokyo Riot police but that is as much about spirit as technique - other members of the organization do Judo and Kendo for much the same reasons. My own teacher in Osaka taught the Osaka police but again its not so much aikido but a selection of techniques.
  • Safe practice has been described - with a link to two articles.Peter Rehse 03:32, 16 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]