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Already a GA. I'm hopful we can give this the final push towards FA status. Buc (talk) 19:49, 17 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, Buc (talk) 19:49, 17 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I did a fair chunk of the work to get this article to GA, so I'm happy to lend a hand getting it up to FA standard. Gazimoff ^Write _Read 21:02, 17 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Ealdgyth (talk · contribs)

You said you wanted to know what to work on before taking to FAC, so I looked at the sourcing and referencing with that in mind. I reviewed the article's sources as I would at FAC.
- Wouldn't it make more sense to source the BAFTA awards to the BAFTA awards site instead of IMDb?
- What makes http://www.soundtrack.net/ a reliable source?
- the WP:MOS frowns on titles of links being in all capitals.

Hope this helps. Please note that I don't watchlist Peer Reviews I've done. If you have a question about something, you'll have to drop a note on my talk page to get my attention. (My watchlist is already WAY too long, adding peer reviews would make things much worse.) 21:23, 19 June 2008 (UTC)

Giggy comments

I do love my three paragraph leads.... :-) - check out Wikipedia:WikiProject Video games/Newsletter/20080409 perhaps.
"The use of actor voices and likenesses was one of the few well received elements of the game" - can you be more specific? Who does the image resemble? Etc. etc.
It feels a bit unbalanced with a lot more plot/gameplay than development/reception.
"With the exception of the interrogation minigame, they are all computer puzzles." - what does "they" refer to? What are you talking about here?
"One of the interrogation mini games in progress, showing a suspect being broken" - again, the more said about the image, the more you can rationalise its educational fair use.
What Ealdgyth said about the BAFTAs. IMDB should be avoided if possible.
I hope these comments help. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Cheers, giggy _(:O) 10:27, 20 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]