Some suggestions:
- "In early 1980s, Madonna signed a singles deal with Sire Records" Should be "In the early 1980s ..." but I think it would be better as "In 1982 ..." (or 1981 or 1983 or whatever year it was that she signed the contract).
- "However, the single was failed to enter Billboard Hot 100." Change this to "However, the single failed to enter Billboard's Hot 100 chart" or "However, the single failed to enter the Billboard Hot 100 chart". You might also consider changing "failed to" to "did not".
- "Her first entry on the chart ..." Consider: "Her first entry in the Hot 100 ..."
- "The following year, Madonna released "Like a Virgin", which reached number one in a number of countries." Dump "a number of countries" and actually name which counties the song became number one in.
- "The single became Madonna's first number-one on the Hot 100 and spent six weeks atop the chart" Consider: "at the top of the chart" rather than "atop".
- "In 1985, she released her second US number-one single "Crazy for You" and her first UK number-one single "Into the Groove", both being motion picture soundtracks " Change to: "In 1985, she released her second US number-one single, "Crazy for You", and and her first UK number-one single, "Into the Groove", both being motion picture soundtracks" (i.e add commas). Also consider: "both being from motion picture soundtracks."
- "Madonna's third album, True Blue, gave her three number one singles in 1986; "Live to Tell", "Papa Don't Preach" and "Open Your Heart"." Change the semi-colon (;) to a colon(:). Also I would suggest: "In 1986 Madonna's third album, True Blue, gave her three number one singles"
- "Other singles from the album, namely "True Blue" and "La Isla Bonita" were top-five hits.[7] Are "True Blue" and "La Isla Bonita" the only other top-five hits from the album? If there are more list them as well.
- It was followed by another number-one single "Who's That Girl" in 1987." What does "it" refer to? You have an album and several singles listed before "it". If you mean the album, True Blue, change it to that but don't hyperlink it this time.
- "Madonna's fourth studio album Like a Prayer released in 1989 gave her another number-one single with the title track, which was the subject of strong reaction from religious groups and media, going to the top of the charts ..." Place a comma before and after Like a Prayer Consider replacing "released in 1989" to just "(1989)". If you're stating that the title song went to number one then "going to the top of the charts" seems redundent. I don't think the blurb about the religious groups and media is needed as it's material that is (or should be) discussed in the main bio of Madonna.
- "This made her the first artist to accumulate seven number-one singles in the 1980s, and the first female performer to get that many number-ones as a solo act" Consider: "This made her the first artist to accumulate seven number-one singles in the 1980s, and also the first female performer to receive seven number-one singles as a solo act"
- "Madonna became the female artist with the most number ones of 1980s and the second artist overall behind Michael Jackson." Consider: "By the end of the 1980s Madonna was second only to Michael Jackson as the artist with the most number one songs." I think most people should be able to figure out that Madonna is the female with the most number one songs if the only person that surpassed her was a man.
- "Beginning the 1990s, Madonna released "Vogue" from I'm Breathless. Change to: "In 1990 Madonna released "Vogue" from the album I'm Breathless.
- "It topped charts in over thirty countries worldwide, including the Billboard Hot 100." Only 10 charts are shown in the list, with only half showing it in the number one position. Change the wording to state this or expand the chart to show all 30 countries and their charts.
- Corrected. However, maximum allowable lilmit as per MOS:DISCOG is 10, hence 10 countries are shown. And that too only nine major music markets + the artist's home country market.
- "The same year, she released "Justify My Love", her ninth number-one single." You can leave this as it is as long as you state the exact year in a previous sentence (as suggested two comments above).
- "Her fifth studio album Erotica was released that same year but failed to generate any chart topping single. Only the title track and "Deeper and Deeper" reached the top ten." Commas before and after Erotica. Change "single" to "singles".
- "In 1995 Madonna released "Take a Bow" from her sixth studio album Bedtime Stories." Consider: "In 1995 Madonna released "Take a Bow" from Bedtime Stories, her sixth studio album."
- "The song became her biggest hit on the Hot 100 and stayed for seven weeks at the top; her longest run at the top position on the chart." Consider: "The song became her biggest hit on the Hot 100 and stayed at the top for seven weeks, making it her longest run at number one."
- "Other top-ten singles released during this period included "Secret" (1994), "You'll See" (1995) and "Don't Cry For Me Argentina" (1996), the later reaching the top of the charts in countries worldwide." The second part probably should start a new sentence. "The Latter" (not "the later") probably should be changed to "The last of these singles ..." Once again: Which countries and why aren't they listed in the chart?
- ""Frozen", from the 1998 album Ray of Light, became her first ever single to debut at number-one in the United Kingdom. It was her first chart topper there since 1990 and marked as her big comeback." Consider adding "also" before "her first chart topper."
- "Madonna entered the 2000s with her twelfth US number-one single, "Music". It made her one of the two female artist with number-ones in three different decades." Consider: "In 2000 Madonna scored her twelfth U.S. number one single with "Music"." Also, 2000 is the final year of the last decade of the 20th Century and not the first year of the first decade of the 21st Century. If Madonna began her recording career in 1982 then "Music" falls in the final year of her second decade, so the second sentence presented here is untrue. (Even if it was true, who is the other artist?)
- " ... whose music video was banned for being too violent" Perhaps again something that isn't needed here but is better suited to the main bio or the Madonna videography.
- "The single peaked at number one in more than forty-five countries and earning a 2007 place in the Guiness Book of World Records as the song topping the charts in most countries." Which countries and why aren't they in the charts?
- "Madonna is ranked as the most successful solo artist on "Billboard Hot 100 All-Time Top Artists".[30] Consider adding "currently" before "ranked" and "the" before "Billboard".
- "She is the most successful female artist in the United Kingdom with most number-one singles than any other female artist.[31] Change "most" to "more".
Hope these suggestions help. Jimknut (talk) 01:24, 6 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]
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