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The following is an archived discussion of a featured list nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured list candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The list was promoted by User:Matthewedwards 00:56, 17 December 2008 [1].

List of states and union territories of India by population

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Nominating this list as I think this meets all the FL criteria. I have completed a peer review from Nichalp and done significant changes as per the suggestions. I have used List of Canadian provinces and territories by population (a FL) as guideline. This is my first nomination for FA/FL so please excuse me for my mistakes. I would try to address any objections to the best of my capacity. Please list down any objections in bullet points as it would help me address them individually and update the status when they are addressed. --GPPande talk! 14:48, 3 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

  • Comment We do not start lists as This is a list of ... anymore. Dabomb87 (talk) 00:02, 4 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
I have removed the initial line and clubbed the entire introduction of Census of India into a small paragraph below first one. --GPPande talk! 08:54, 4 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

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Check now. Let me know if you meant something specific. --GPPande talk! 15:15, 7 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
In the decade of 1991–2001, interstate migration to larger cities led to rapid increase in India's urban population. -- this need not be true. States such as UP & Maharashtra also has witnessed a large instate migration. Needs figures. Suggest this be copyedited by someone from the league of copyeditors. =Nichalp «Talk»= 18:04, 8 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Valid and true. I myself being an example of intrastate migrant. I have removed interstate word and rephrased the sentence as In the decade of 1991–2001, migration to larger cities such as Pune and Bangalore led to rapid increase in India's urban population. I took this fact from Census of India website and so did not doubt it. Included Pune and Bangalore as an example with 2 new refs added. For migration to other cities Census citation should suffice. Let me know your thoughts. --GPPande talk! 20:10, 8 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
I'm not very happy with the quality of the prose. I can't pinpoint specific examples, but I suggest you contact an independent copyeditor to fix issues. =Nichalp «Talk»= 02:43, 11 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Sure. I would seek expert's help here. Meanwhile, I tried my hand on it. See here. Not sure, if this will make the FLC void as of now. I think FL candidature should remain active for more comments and result while I work on prose part. --GPPande 10:35, 11 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
I copyedited a bit, and yeah, it does need a copyedit. I suggest working on the rest of the paragraphs to fix similar issues like what I've done in the first two paragraphs. In particular, I think commas aren't used enough; there are a lot of run-on sentences because of this. Gary King (talk) 19:31, 11 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Comment In the last paragraph of the lead, the discussion on child sex ratio seems unnecessarily lengthy, given child sex ratio does not even feature in the list proper. I am not opposing the inclusion of such a discussion (because child sex ratio is a part of overall sex ratio), but can it be decreased?
Indeed, IMO, it is not necessary to devote one whole paragraph to sex ratio. Rather, we can decrease the content of discussion on sex ratio, and, if needed, add some content on population density (which seems to be missing from the lead).--Dwaipayan (talk) 22:12, 11 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Reply to Nichalp and Dwaipayanc:

  • Gary helped with this article. I have made a small section in prose for census information which would elaborate the tabular data below. Also did similar c/e as per Gary.
  • Removed the excess information on child sex ratio.
  • Included density data for India in lead based on geo-regions. This information explains why certain states have so high density than other at a high level.
  • Included highlights of state growth rates.

Feel free to tell if more improvements are needed. --GPPande 13:07, 12 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Almost there;

Remove the child sex ratio red link, increase the width of the second column (the names of the states are all cramped up), decrease the width of the third column. (You would need to abbreviate the headings most probably to achieve it) =Nichalp «Talk»= 14:02, 15 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Done. Created article Child sex ratio and abbreviated the headings to suit column widths. --GPPande 18:47, 15 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Support Remove the flag at the bottom of the table, and see if you can set a % to the name of the state column -- it still looks cramped. =Nichalp «Talk»= 19:13, 15 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for helping with column width. I replaced template IND with text India. --GPPande 07:16, 16 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Support--Dwaipayan (talk) 00:27, 16 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

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