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The list was promoted by PresN via FACBot (talk) 02:00:53 22 August 2019 (UTC) [1].

List of chief ministers of Chhattisgarh edit

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Nominator(s): TryKid (talk) 04:52, 9 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

This is my second FLC nomination, my first, Districts of Bhutan, is at four supports and a source review support. I've made some changes to this list, to be more in line with List of chief ministers of Karnataka, a featured list. I think it meets the criteria. TryKid (talk) 04:52, 9 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

  • Comment
  • Your link to bifurcated is an WP:EASTEREGG. Not sure if this is the best word anyway.
  • In 2018 the current incumbent... 2018 is not current.
  • No need for sub-sub headings. One subheading for notes and one for references should be enough. Mattximus (talk) 17:54, 9 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
@Mattximus:, I've tried to solve the first two issues, let me know what you think about it. I think the sub headings are simply stylistic choice, it's not needed, but looks good, especially on mobile phones, at least to me. If it is causing any problems, let me know. TryKid (talk) 18:49, 9 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"bifurcated" can be replaced with "carved out of", if you think that is better.... Thanks for the quick review though. TryKid (talk) 18:55, 9 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Yeah, that looks a bit better. But I'm sure someone can suggest something better. TryKid (talk) 19:26, 9 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
There is a more encyclopedic word for the creation of the state, it is "partitioned", which is much better than "carved out of". Mattximus (talk) 00:32, 11 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
@Mattximus: When I hear the word "partition", it reminds me of India-Pakistan partition, and that wasn't very pleasant. I don't think partition is the right word. I've read a lot of news reports about the creation of states (Telangana, Chhattisgarh, Jharkhand, Uttranchal, etc), none of them use "partition". See this report from The Hindu. The Hindu is very reputable source and it uses "carved out of", "bifurcation" and "separate"; never "partition". I don't think the word "partition" should be used out of the context of Pakistan or sometimes the state of Bengal (in British Raj). Regards, TryKid (talk) 11:09, 11 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
How about split from? "Carved out of" is not encyclopedic and needs to be replaced. Mattximus (talk) 13:20, 11 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
@Mattximus:, That's better I think, done. Thank you. TryKid (talk) 13:45, 11 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
@Mattximus:, If you have time, you can check out the list again. I've made some minor changes and hopefully you'll like the new wording. TryKid (talk) 23:54, 16 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
It looks good, just a few little things.
  • The wording is a bit strange. Maybe this is a bit better?

"The first chief minister was Ajit Jogi of the Indian National Congress. He was succeeded in 2003 by Raman Singh of the Bharatiya Janata Party who served three consecutive five-year terms. His successor, and current incumbent, is the Indian National Congress leader Bhupesh Baghel who was elected chief minister in 2018."

Or something like that? Just to make it a bit easier to read.

  • I still think you should have a subheading for notes and one for references, instead of both of those inside a third subheading (at present there are too many subheadings, and such a small article does not need sub sub headings)
  • I think you should remove the external link subheading since it's just a link to some guy's personal website?

Just those three comments and the rest looks good! Mattximus (talk) 16:31, 3 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@Mattximus:, I've solved the two comments. I've copy pasted your version with some modification: I removed the two instances "chief minister" for better flow. I've also retained the first sentence of original paragraph, since information about the birth of the state seems important. If that is not okay, you can suggest something. I really appreciate you giving some time to me. TryKid (talk) 23:47, 3 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Support Looks good now, I just reworded the first sentence so it is not passive. Mattximus (talk) 03:00, 4 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Thank you very much for the support. TryKid (talk) 04:02, 4 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Comments
  • The infobox image needs an alt text.
  • "Following elections to the Chhattisgarh Legislative Assembly." The word 'Chattisgarh' is getting repetitive here. Removing it will create a better flow.
This hasn't been fixed. Yashthepunisher (talk) 12:20, 12 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • Chhattisgarh is used three times in the first paragraph of the lead, one time in the second paragraph and two times in the infobox. I don't see where I can replace Chhattisgarh with something else. Maybe replace "Chief Minister of Chhattisgarh" with just "Chief Minister". But the current usage is consistent with two other featured lists — List of chief ministers of West Bengal and List of chief ministers of Karnataka. TryKid (talk) 12:48, 12 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
    @Yashthepunisher:, forgot to ping. TryKid (talk) 12:49, 12 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Given that he has the confidence of the assembly". --> Given that they have the confidence of the assembly. It should be gender neutral.

Yashthepunisher (talk) 05:13, 12 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

  • Quick comment – Regarding note b, is it common in Indian English for the hyphen to be in "MLA's"? I'm not sure it would be in U.S. English, but if it is used there that would be fine. Giants2008 (Talk) 21:21, 6 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
    No, that was a mistake! Thank you very much for pointing it out. TryKid (talk) 03:07, 7 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
    • Support – The only issue I saw has been fixed. Nice work. Giants2008 (Talk) 21:26, 7 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
      Thank you very much for the support. TryKid (talk) 09:47, 8 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Source review passed (with only the most minor of change); promoting. --PresN 02:00, 22 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

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