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The list was promoted by Giants2008 21:07, 2 September 2011 [1].

List of accolades received by Black Swan edit

List of accolades received by Black Swan (edit | talk | history | protect | delete | links | watch | logs | views)

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Nominator(s): User:Aquila89, User:Bruce Campbell, User:Crystal Clear x3

User:Aquila89, User:Bruce Campbell and I are nominating this for featured list because we believe that it meets the FL criteria. Crystal Clear x3 05:06, 18 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from — Legolas (talk2me) 06:44, 28 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
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  • Thriller movie? --> Thriller film is always better, movie sounds generic.

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  • Actually the opening sentence needs to be broken down somewhere. At present it doesn't flow well.

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  • USD $415,820 --> Problematic. If I expand it, it will read United states dollar dollar 415,... I always suggest to have it as $415,820 in the first instance and from the next instances, just the sum and the symbol. Follow this throughout the prose.

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  • During Black Swan's opening weekend it grossed over USD $1.4 million --> After Black Swan's ...

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  • averaging around USD $80,210 per theater. The per location average was the second highest for the opening weekend of 2010 --> This can be combined to flow well. "averaging around USD $80,210 per theater, the second highest per location for the opening weekend of 2010.

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  • Critics also took a liking to the film, with review aggregator website Rotten Tomatoes reporting it to have an approval rating of 88 percent and listing it among their lists for the year's best movies --> Meh prose. "Critics appreciated the film, with review aggregator website Rotten Tomatoes reporting an approval rating of 88 percent and placing it among their lists for the year's best films."

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  • The film has received honors --> Start wit "Black Swan"

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  • to the cast's acting performances --> The word cast here implies the actors only --> "to the cast's performance"

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  • Replace movie with film throughout.

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  • Another supporting performance in Black Swan up for awards came from --> Doesn't make sense

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  • given to actresses in a leading 2010 film role. --> "for" a leading film role in 2010.

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  • its only win was for Portman for Best Actress in a dramatic motion picture --> its only win was Best Actress in a dramatic motion picture, for Portman.

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  • More recognition for the acting featured in the film --> More recognition for the film

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  • Remove the word each from the last line of third para. It is implied that the noination was for each of MTV and TCA.

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  • Alliance of Women award count wrong in infobox.

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  • Please check the infobox thoroughly. There are many discrepancies.

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  • Satellite Awards, why the sudden inclusion of em-dash?
I'm not sure what you mean by this... – has already been used in the list for the Golden Globes. Aside from those two, the rest do not need dashes in their categories.

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  • Box Office Mojo is owned and published by Brandon Gray.

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  • What makes Movie City News a reliable source?

::::I've always been under the impression that it is, but I've asked User:Dabomb87 just to make sure.

I've instead replaced the ref with the awards actual website listing
  • Same for Awards DAily.

::::Same thing as above I've replaced those with Alt Film Guide, which is an acceptable RS for FLs Crystal Clear x3 03:03, 21 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

  • Check repeated dashes in references like "--" which should be en-dash

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Image changed

At present I see quite a lot of prose issues and consistency. — Legolas (talk2me) 11:05, 20 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Aquila89 has taken care of most of Legolas's concerns ([2]) and I fixed/addressed the remaining. Crystal Clear x3 00:38, 21 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Support The article looks fine now. — Legolas (talk2me) 06:44, 28 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from Ruby2010 comment! 02:27, 25 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Comments from Ruby2010
  • "Natalie Portman's performance has gained the most attention from award groups" - Gained the most attention out of what? The cast? Other actresses?

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  • You seem to have an excess of commas (such as in "More recognition for the film came from the Screen Actors Guild, at their 17th annual ceremony, awarding Portman in her respective field as well as nominating the entire cast." - see bolded)

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  • "...again with 12 nominations, which the only difference being that the later nominated Hershey instead of Kunis for Best Supporting Actress and the its composer, Clint Mansell, rather than the film's visual effects." - Sentence needs c/e

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Re-worded to "Black Swan performed similarly at the 64th British Academy Film Awards, again with 12 nominations, and was also nominated in similar categories."
  • "...but despite Arnonofsky's feature winning Best Film, it was all up for their Movie You Wanted To Love But Just Couldn‘t accolade." "all up" does not sound very encyclopedic

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  • Add publisher for New York Times (in general ref)

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  • Why no URL for ref 36?
The url did exist, but then became a deadlink, so I tried to make it into a treelink Crystal Clear x3 13:50, 24 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Resolve above comments and I'll be happy to support Ruby2010 comment! 01:48, 24 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for your comments, much appreciated! Crystal Clear x3 13:50, 24 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Support - comments now resolved Ruby2010 comment! 02:27, 25 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from Giants2008 (27 and counting) 17:37, 25 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Comments –
  • Photo caption could use a period at the end.

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  • "with the only difference being that the later nominated Hershey instead...". Two things. First, "later" would be better as "latter". Second, "difference" should be plural since two are givene, not one. Also, I'm not fully sold about using "latter" to start with. It's been two sentences since the other award show was mentioned, and the most recent reference to it was to the "latter" as well. It's the latter instead of the latter. :-)
Lol you lost me at the first latter. There seems to be quite a few problems with that sentence, so I've trimmed it down to: "Black Swan performed similarly at the 64th British Academy Film Awards, again with 12 nominations, and was also nominated in similar categories."
  • Would be nice for these award lists to have a note in the date column saying that the links go to articles on the various individual award ceremonies. They have much more value than the simple date links that they appear to be at first glance, and it's possible that readers may not catch on at first.

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done Crystal Clear x3 01:50, 25 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from The Rambling Man (talk) 11:38, 29 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Comments
  • "Awards & Nominations" -> nominations.

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  • What makes it "American" out of interest? Is it the director? The producer? The movie house making it? The script writer? Isn't it better to just refer to it as an English language movie?

removed American

  • "in select cities " shouldn't that be "selected"?

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  • "about $415,820" very precise for "about".

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  • Consecutive sentences starting with "After Black Swan..."

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  • First use of USD is a linked $, next is just a $, next is USD $. Odd.

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  • " and placing it " don't see a need for the "and" here.

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But the Rotten Tomatoes rating and the top ten lists are different things. Rotten Tomatoes just collects reviews, not top ten lists. Doesn't the sentence now give the impression that the RT rating put the film among the critics' list for the year's best films?
  • "It also got five" hate "got", perhaps "received"?

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  • "three awards each at the" -> "three awards at both the..."

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The Rambling Man (talk) 18:54, 28 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for your comments. Crystal Clear x3 03:50, 29 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support - well written and referenced article. Have no issue with its promotion. Good job guys.--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 10:37, 1 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support - A beautiful list--well done! --Another Believer (Talk) 15:54, 1 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]
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