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List of World Heritage Sites in the Netherlands edit

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Nominator(s): Tone 15:52, 27 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

With the successful promotion of Lithuania and the nomination of Sweden going well, it's time we move to the new region. The Netherlands has quite some sites, and some are overseas. I'm not sure if the layout of the two maps it optimal but we can play with that. The rest of the list follows the standard style. Tone 15:52, 27 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Comments
  • Surely the Netherlands and Curacao should be linked in the lead?
  • Could do with an explanation in the lead of Curacao's status
  • "The first site added to the list was Schokland and Surroundings, in 1995" - no reason for that comma
  • There's an unnecessary gap before ref 2
  • "It was an inhabited peninsula since pre-historic times" => "It is a peninsula which had been inhabited since prehistoric times"
  • "It is the only fortification....." - in the Netherlands? The whole world?
  • "draininig the water from the polders" - first word is spelt wrong
  • "Construction of hydraulic began" - hydraulic what? There's at least one word missing here
  • "Willemstad was established as a trading settlement by the people" => "Willemstad was established as a trading settlement by people". Is there a more specific word than "people"? Were they merchants?
  • "which reflect the mix of Dutch cultural influences with those of Spanish and Portuguese" => "which reflect the mix of Dutch, Spanish and Portuguese cultural influences"
  • " large sections of the population of Low Countries" => " large sections of the population of the Low Countries"
  • "and, under the supervision of Johannes van den Bosch constructed" - need a comma after Bosch to close off the clause
  • "combination of education, healthcare and (forced) labour" - earlier you used US English spelling "-ize", so you should change the spelling of the last word to match this
  • "to ensure the self-sufficiecy" - spelt wrong
  • "They were run on slave labour" - same note re: US spelling
  • "Curaçao is a constitute country" - penultimate word is spelt wrong
  • Think that's it from me..... -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 20:35, 27 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]
    • @ChrisTheDude: I'm through, sorry it took a while. All fixed. I got rid of the footnotes (from some previous versions) as I could get everything to the lead. --Tone 20:06, 15 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Source review - Pass edit

Doing now Aza24 (talk) 05:34, 18 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

  • Given that all of the sources, other than 3, are UNESCO sources everything looks good. The other 3 are reliable and formatted correctly, pass for source review. Aza24 (talk) 05:40, 18 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support - sorry I forgot to revisit this one for so long...... -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 18:07, 31 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support Nice work. ~ HAL333 04:38, 26 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from TRM edit

Fixed.
  • Now for confusion. Is it the Netherlands or the Kingdom of the Netherlands??
I think I got this right. Netherlands as the country, per UNESCO. Kingdom, because of Curaçao and Bonnaire.
  • "[3][4][5]." errant full stop.
Done.
  • "Schokland symbolizes the struggle of the people of the Netherlands against the sea." tourist brochure time.
Good point, rephrased.
  • "in 1859. In the 1940s" repetitive.
Rephrased.
  • "symbolizes" vs "defence" vs "kilometre" which variant of English is in play here?
Will go with the UK style.
  • Link every linked item in the table every time, it's sortable. E.g. polder isn't linked first time anyway....
Added link. Not sure if I got all you had in mind.
  • "Water Board Assembly Houses" what are these? Captialised, notable?
This is from the source.
  • "Ir.D.F. Woudagemaal (D.F. Wouda Steam Pumping Station)" is piped to a redirect, why?
  • Link Friesland. And Wouda.
Fixed both.
@The Rambling Man: This one is tricky. I see the same comment for the Poland list. I have two options here. I could either go with "at the time of listing", as per the source, or I could check the homepage of the place and say As of 2020, though this sounds a bit OR/SYNTH to me. What do you suggest? I am more inclined to the first option.
First option works for me. The Rambling Man (Hands! Face! Space!!!!) 18:59, 1 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
@The Rambling Man: Done :) --Tone 19:39, 1 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "with the Renaissance planning principles." no need for "the".
Fixed.
  • "four units make up a square" don't understand this.
Removed, little added value.
  • "of De Stijl movement" of the De Stijl...
  • "It is now preserved ..." as above "now/today/currently" etc.
  • "harbouring species such as harbour seal" unfortunate repeat of "harbour"
  • "2,700 hectares" convert.
  • "over ... over" one could be "more than".
  • "entire Caribbean Sea" no need for Sea.
  • " and (forced) labor to " vs " slave labor", call it as it is?
Not this one, that was partially a penal colony. The one in Curaçao was slave labor.
  • "y tropical climate. Due to the climate," repetitive.
Reworded.
  • "along the river Rhine" river is nugatory.
Probably.

That's it on a quick run. The Rambling Man (Hands! Face! Space!!!!) 23:06, 31 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@The Rambling Man: I'm through, just let me know what you think about the point above. Great review, thanks! --Tone 17:38, 1 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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