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I never like seeing blatant repetition from one sentence to another, like what exists in "PrvaLiga. PrvaLiga, also known by the abbreviation 1. SNL". The easiest fix I see would be to make the second sentence "Also known by the abbreviation 1. SNL, PrvaLiga...".
"most of Slovenian teams competed for the title of regional champions...". Needs "the" before "Slovenian".
You don't really need to link clubs multiple times in the lead; one link at the point of first mention is sufficient, and the extra blue isn't desireable if it can be avoided. Among other things, I see three Maribor links and two Gorica links.
- Still see the Gorica links, and a couple excess Olimpija Ljubljana links late in the lead. Giants2008 (Talk) 23:08, 17 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"The" is needed at the start of "2006–07 season gave rise to a surprising champion...".
By the way, whose opinion is it that Domzale's title was surprising? That's something crying out for attribution.
"a feat they have repeated the next season." "have" should be removed as it messes with the sentence as a whole.
"The majority of Maribors's titles...". "Maribors's" has one s too many, before the apostrophe.
"by the end of 2004–05 season..." could use another "the" before the years.
"bankrupcty" is a typo, which should be "bankruptcy".
The Matjaz Kek photo caption could use a citation, since the lead doesn't really support it (at least not him winning as a player).
From looking at the current season's article, I see that Maribor has clinched the 2011–12 title already. When is the list going to be updated? At the end of the season? At the least, I'd expect to see a sentence in the lead saying that Maribor has won the title.
Footnote A-1: "are a distinct and separate clubs". Remove "a" from this bit.
Also, add "The" at the start of the next sentence, and change "does not" to "do not", since that refers to multiple associations.
Footnote B-1: Not a big deal, but in "His 22 goals of the season", I feel that "of" should ideally be "in" or "during".
Publisher of refs 11 and 12 shouldn't be italicized, since this isn't a printed publication.
Hyphen in ref 15 should be an en dash per the Manual of Style. Giants2008 (Talk) 01:30, 17 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Done everything except the 2011–12 update. I was planning to update and add the stats for the current season in three days, when the final round is scheduled. However, I can do it sooner if you believe that its too important to wait until then. I also left the 'blue links' for the Olimpija Ljubljana, as there are two teams with that name (explained in the article). This way its probably easier to distinguish both of them (in case if the new team ever wins anything or finishes high enough on the table that it is included in the list, which will probably happen this year). Ratipok (talk) 03:03, 17 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- If you were planning to change it within a few days anyway, I wouldn't worry about it too much. Just make sure that when you do update for this year, you make all necessary changes in the lead for things like number of competitions, Maribor titles, and the most recent season. Giants2008 (Talk) 23:08, 17 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Yes, I know and I will make sure everything will be in order:). The exces links of Gorica and Olimpija Ljubljana were removed form the lead. Ratipok (talk) 01:17, 18 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
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