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The following is an archived discussion of a featured list nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured list candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The list was promoted by Dabomb87 14:51, 2 July 2010 [1].

List of Madonna concert tours edit

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Nominator(s): --Legolas (talk2me) 10:29, 10 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I am nominating this for featured list because I believe this is a comprehensive list of Madonna's world and promotional tours, as well as her live performances. The article has gone through a Peer review and hence I believe that with the consensus of my fellow editors, the article can be promoted to a Featured List. --Legolas (talk2me) 10:29, 10 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from TbhotchTalk C. 16:01, 16 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]
*Comments by TbhotchTalk C.
  • Lead
    • X-STaTIC PRo=CeSS -> Wikilink
      • Wikilink will take you to Steven Klein's page. Is it appropriate to have same links twice? --Legolas (talk2me) 12:00, 11 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]
    • grossing tour ever for a female artist -> grossing tour ever for a female artist at that time
      • Done
    • Reference 9 -> ISBN failing
  • According to this the ISBN is 9085950026 not 9085950023, but the first does not appear too. TbhotchTalk C. 17:05, 11 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • Concert tours
    • Duration (for all) -> Source?
      • This doesnot require source as it is taken from the article itself.
OK
  • The Virgin tour
    • Critics panned the tour, calling it atrocious and deducting that Madonna "will be out of business in six months". -> Source?
      • Added Taraborrelli.
    • were completely sold out in a record-breaking 34 minutes. -> Source?
      • Added.
    • million.[15][1] -> million.[1][15]
  • Who's That Girl World Tour
    • Reference 16 -> ISBN failing, I think you should change it for the ISBN I provided you at Spotlight (song).
      • Added that.
  • Blond Ambition World Tour
    • aka -> also known as
    • Reference 19 -> ISBN failing
  • Promotion tours
    • Duration (for all) -> Source?
      • As before.
  • Don't Tell Me Promo Tour
    • were
  • Live Performances

The The Power of Good-Bye and Shanti/Ashtangi and Ray of Light performance order is incorrect, the vmas was before the emas. Also the 2005 ema Hung up performance is not included. Johnnyboytoy (talk)

Resolved comments from 12345abcxyz20082009 (talk) 15:32, 22 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Comments
  • Comment: Well, this is a good list, definitely FL material, so my objections are just nit-pickings.
    • "and in Italy the Pope called for a boycott". "in Italy" is an apposition, so it must be separated by commas.
      • Done.
    • "dancers of both sex" -> "dancers of both sexes"
      • Done
    • "Madonna was inspired to create the tour, after taking part[...]". No comma.
      • Done.
    • "This record was broken in 2008 with the[...]" Those words are used in the previous sentence. Maybe reword it to "This feat was surpassed in 2008"?
      • Good.
    • Is it worth noting that Madonna hasn't toured Australia since 1993 and has since apologized for it?
      • Added a small part.
    • In the Virgin Tour synopsis "Madonna" is repeated too often.
      • Corrected.
    • Is the "See also" section needed for one link? You can link it in the lead, here: "Sticky & Sweet Tour, which went on to become the highest grossing tour ever by a solo artist".
      • Done.

Well, that's all from me. I'll happily support once these minor tweaks are done.--12345abcxyz20082009 (talk) 22:48, 20 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]

All concerns have been addressed. Thank you for your comments. --Legolas (talk2me) 10:48, 22 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Resolved comments from The Rambling Man (talk) 07:37, 30 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Comments
  • "concert tours, seven of which have been world tours" any way to avoid repeating "tours" in here?
  • " Her 1985 debut, The Virgin Tour, was based in North America only. Critically panned, the tour went on to collect more than US $17 million." I'd merge these two sentences.
  • "embarked" repeated rather quickly. Find another phrase.
  • "showmanship and exquisite dresses" -> is "exquisite" a quote? If so, put in quotes, if not, it's a bit POV.
  • "an Afro wig" is this clear to our international audience?
  • "Madonna once the Harlow harlot and now a perky harlequin, is" this is a direct quote, are you sure there isn't a comma before once?
  • "ne of the most successful and highest-grossing concert tour" -> tours.
  • "top grossing tour" hyphenate?
  • Same for "highest grossing"
  • "Both Confessions and Sticky & Sweet Tours had planned to go to Australia.." don't think the tours themselves had planned that, maybe "the tours had been planned to ..."
  • "record breaking" hyphenate.
  • "prestigious" cite.
  • Ref 38 has "Jo Whiley" while all other refs are surname, first name.

The Rambling Man (talk) 20:19, 28 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]

  • Comment: Make sure American English is used in this article, as Madonna is an American recording artist. For example, favorable, not "favourable". That's the only issue I found, fix anything like that and I'll support. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 16:14, 30 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]


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