Wikipedia:Featured list candidates/List of Essendon Football Club honours/archive1

The following is an archived discussion of a featured list nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured list candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The list was not promoted by Dabomb87 22:17, 3 December 2009 [1].

List of Essendon Football Club honours edit

Nominator(s): Aaroncrick (talk) Review me! 22:27, 21 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Featured list candidates/List of Essendon Football Club honours/archive1

I am nominating this for featured list because I feel it meets the criteria despite limited information even in a club book. Aaroncrick (talk) Review me! 22:27, 21 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Comment empty cells should have centered emdashes (—). Mm40 (talk) 00:38, 22 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

How do we centre? Aaroncrick (talk) Review me! 19:53, 22 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Just add align=center| to the cell; I've done the first row for you.—Chris!_c/t 18:36, 23 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks. Aaroncrick (talk) Review me! 19:53, 24 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Comment Color need to be accompanied with symbol; see recently promoted featured lists for example—Chris!_c/t 06:20, 22 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Done? Aaroncrick (talk) Review me! 08:43, 26 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from The Rambling Man (talk) 13:49, 1 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Caption for "record equalling" should be hyphenated.
- Done. Aaroncrick (talk) Review me! 20:05, 24 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]
"involved in " - a bit vague. Tell me exactly what they do.
- Done. Aaroncrick (talk) Review me! 20:05, 24 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Don't use VFA without using the expanded version first.
- Done. Aaroncrick (talk) Review me! 20:05, 24 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]
" W. S. Crichton Medal (best and fairest)" - what does the text in parentheses relate to? Confused. Later you refer to "Best and Fairest" (capitalised)...
- Done? Aaroncrick (talk) Review me! 20:05, 24 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]
"a club record three times, in 1942 1946 and 1949, he was also awarded the W. S. Crichton Medal on a record equaling seven occasions between 1934 and 1943." not keen on the follow-on clauses and the number of missing hyphens here...
- Tweaked? Aaroncrick (talk) Review me! 08:32, 26 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Richmond is a dab.
- Done. Aaroncrick (talk) Review me! 20:05, 24 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]
"second longest " - hyphen here?
- Done. Aaroncrick (talk) Review me! 20:05, 24 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Is there a link for "full-forward"?
- Done. Aaroncrick (talk) Review me! 20:05, 24 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]
You need some symbols to accompany the colour coding for WP:ACCESS.
- Done. Aaroncrick (talk) Review me! 08:44, 26 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Why is "Goalkicker" capitalised in the table?
- Done. Aaroncrick (talk) Review me! 20:05, 24 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]
1907 coach has a spare hyphen.
- Done. Aaroncrick (talk) Review me! 20:05, 24 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Don't mix date formats in the references.
- Done. Aaroncrick (talk) Review me! 20:05, 24 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

The Rambling Man (talk) 19:02, 22 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

You use VFL without explaining it.
"The club Best and Fairest award ..." isn't it "The club's..."?
You talk about the Best and Fairest a bit, but then launch into "Dick Reynolds won the Brownlow Medal..." what's that awarded for? And I'm guessing it's not an Essendon award, so for non-experts you should offer us some context...
Don't relink best and fairest, and be consistent with the capitalisation.
"a club record " hyphenate club-record.
Instead of just "Premiership" for the key, perhaps you could say "Essendon won the AFL Grand Final" or similar, to make it clear to non-experts what you mean.

The Rambling Man (talk) 13:49, 1 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Dabs; please check the disambiguation links identified in the toolbox. Dabomb87 (talk) 15:56, 24 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Done. Aaroncrick (talk) Review me! 20:05, 24 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Comments –

The VFL/AFL link redirects to AFL, so that doesn't have much use. Also, I remember seeing somewhere that slashes are discouraged in text. Maybe try a dash?
Hyphen for "record equaling".
Remove comma after Kevin Sheedy.
"Despite no player kicking 1000 career goals, full-forward Matthew Lloyd, is the clubs leading goal-kicker with 925, ahead of ruckman Simon Madden with 575." Couple of issues here. Lloyd didn't score 925 despite no one having 1,000, so I don't get that sentence. Also, change "clubs" to "club's".
Change semi-colon in last sentence of lead to a regular comma.
Any reason the names are sorting by first name rather than last? Is this a custom for Australia-related lists that I'm only discovering now?
- Will do Aaroncrick (talk) Review me! 05:01, 29 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Check 1937 Crichton Medal winner for a broken wikilink.
Crichton Medal is given as W. S. Crichton Medal in the lead and W.S. Crichton Medal (without spaces) in the table. I'd imagine it should be the former throughout, since that complies better with our naming guidelines and avoids a minor redirect. Giants2008 (27 and counting) 19:15, 28 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Done the rest. Aaroncrick (talk) Review me! 05:01, 29 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

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