Wikipedia:Featured list candidates/General Secretary of the Communist Party of the Soviet Union/archive1

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The list was promoted by Giants2008 19:12, 10 May 2011 [1].

General Secretary of the Communist Party of the Soviet Union edit

Featured list candidates/General Secretary of the Communist Party of the Soviet Union/archive1

Nominator(s): --TIAYN (talk) 18:11, 24 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Well as it turned out, my last FL candidate (which is still waiting for more reviewers; First Deputy Chairman of the Soviet Union) was not my last FL Soviet-topic candidate. --TIAYN (talk) 18:11, 24 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from ♫Greatorangepumpkin♫T 18:03, 2 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]

*Comments

- Done Mikhail Gorbachev ruled the Soviet Union through the office of General Secretary until 1990 when the Communist Party lost it's monopoly of power over the political system — you forgot a comma after "until 1990"; sentence beginning with a conjunction means it is a compound sentence and should not be merged with the matrix sentence without adding a comma between them.
- Done The office of President of the Soviet Union was established so that Gorbachev still retained his role as leader of the Soviet Union.[10] — without comma it is confusing what you want to tell us. Without the comma, the sentence has two meanings: Either it was established, so... or it was established, so that...
- Done He was succeeded by his deputy, Vladimir Ivashko, who only served for five days as Acting General Secretary before Russian President Boris Yeltsin suspended all Communist Party activity.[12] why is president capitalized?
- Done As Technical Secretary Stasova and her staff of four women, were responsible for maintaining correspondence with provincial party cells, assigning work, keeping financial records, distributing Party funds,[14] formulating party structure policy and appointing new personnel.[15] — "As Technical Secretary, Stasova and her staff of four women were responsible for maintaining correspondence with provincial party cells, assigning work, keeping financial records, distributing Party funds,[14] formulating party structure policy and appointing new personnel.[15]"
- Done When her office was dissolved Stasova was not considered a serious competitor for the post of Responsible Secretary, the successor office to the Chairman of the Secretariat.[18] — "When her office was dissolved, Stasova was not considered a serious competitor for the post of Responsible Secretary, the successor office to the Chairman of the Secretariat.[18]"

Support ~~after done~~ now.--♫Greatorangepumpkin♫T 14:36, 2 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Comments –

Done ~~Excess "the" needs removal in "were obliged by protocol to rule the country the in the same way as Brezhnev had."~~
Done ~~Konstantin Chemenko: Hyphen in "72-years old" should be removed as well.~~
Done ~~Not a big deal, but the dash in Vladimir Ivashko's picture column would look nicer if it was centered.~~ Giants2008 (27 and counting) 18:17, 3 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from The Rambling Man (talk) 16:23, 8 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Done Would move ref [7] to end of sentence.
Done "August 1991 Coup" this is not its official title so uncapitalise Coup.
Done "more-or-less like a secretary, a somewhat " little bit unencyclopedic for my taste.
Done No real need to relink Brezhnev in the table as it's not sortable.
Done Category says "1922 foundation.." but the list says 1917 was the first time someone occupied the post, albeit under a different title.

Otherwise excellent. The Rambling Man (talk) 16:13, 8 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks! :) --TIAYN (talk) 16:21, 8 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]

SupportComment Three links in the See also section are already in the {{Soviet Union topics}} template, the other three links should be in that template. Move the other three links to the aforementioned template and remove the See also section.--Cheetah (talk) 22:53, 1 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- Done --TIAYN (talk) 15:46, 2 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Support another good list from TIAYN after some good work on the comments. The Rambling Man (talk) 14:37, 9 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

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