Wikipedia:Featured article review/Bryce Canyon National Park/archive1
- The following is an archived discussion of a featured article review. Please do not modify it. Further comments should be made on the article's talk page or at Wikipedia talk:Featured article review). No further edits should be made to this page.
The article was kept by User:Joelr31 13:49, 5 January 2009 [1].
Review commentary
edit- Notified Mav, WP Protected areas, WP Utah, WP Earthquakes
This article was promoted four years ago, and needs many inline citations to meet current standards, since it only has one currently. Judgesurreal777 (talk) 21:39, 11 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- I still have the same books used as the listed references and will add inline cites. --mav (talk) 01:00, 12 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Off the top of my head (can't do much as I am enmired elsewhere but a couple of things stick out) - if the article were bigger, the gallery section could be integrated nicely in the article. As it is only 24k, there should be scope to do this. Things I'd like to see embellished are flora, and the two bulleted segment faunal regions could be expanded and made into paragraphs. National Parks are about preserving environments, so focussing on some of the biological is a fantastic was of introducing readers to the delights of biology. With most articles I do, especially plants, I slot in (or help the main contributor) scientific names - the Everglades is a good example. Be good to add a bit on the soil types as well. Can expand on the threats to the park, and are there any endangered plants or animals which depend on it? I will ping Moni3 too as she did all the Everglades ones... Cheers, Casliber (talk · contribs) 02:12, 12 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Many inline cites added. Please add fact tags as needed and I'll track down any remaining items that need inline cites. As for images: I would rather remove the gallery and reduce the size of the large photo than to expand the article solely to accommodate them. The amount of info in this article is already proportionate to its size and the amount that can be written about it. This is a small park that protects pretty much just the erosional features and small areas beyond them and therefore has the same flora and fauna as the corresponding life zones in the High Plateaus. --mav (talk) 00:30, 17 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- OK, I know next to nothing about US natural history, so am ignorant. Even small parks here in Oz often have something unique in them. Many restricted species do occur across an area of similar space to a park but the park is the only place that is protected by legislation. Agree that the sole reason for expanding the article should not be to accommodate images. Cheers, Casliber (talk · contribs) 03:37, 17 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Many inline cites added. Please add fact tags as needed and I'll track down any remaining items that need inline cites. As for images: I would rather remove the gallery and reduce the size of the large photo than to expand the article solely to accommodate them. The amount of info in this article is already proportionate to its size and the amount that can be written about it. This is a small park that protects pretty much just the erosional features and small areas beyond them and therefore has the same flora and fauna as the corresponding life zones in the High Plateaus. --mav (talk) 00:30, 17 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Off the top of my head (can't do much as I am enmired elsewhere but a couple of things stick out) - if the article were bigger, the gallery section could be integrated nicely in the article. As it is only 24k, there should be scope to do this. Things I'd like to see embellished are flora, and the two bulleted segment faunal regions could be expanded and made into paragraphs. National Parks are about preserving environments, so focussing on some of the biological is a fantastic was of introducing readers to the delights of biology. With most articles I do, especially plants, I slot in (or help the main contributor) scientific names - the Everglades is a good example. Be good to add a bit on the soil types as well. Can expand on the threats to the park, and are there any endangered plants or animals which depend on it? I will ping Moni3 too as she did all the Everglades ones... Cheers, Casliber (talk · contribs) 02:12, 12 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- In its present state, this article wouldn't get through GA, never mind FA. It needs to be much more thoroughly cited. --Malleus Fatuorum (talk) 02:21, 12 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- I used Bryce and Zion as guides when I wrote Everglades National Park. I don't recall the citations being so slim (but seriously - who remembers what happened last week?). This place is spell-binding, so I hope it can keep its FA status with some improvements. Let me know if you need me to do anything. --Moni3 (talk) 21:27, 12 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- I found some stuff on the Utah Prairie Dog and added it (as it was specific for the park), but there is more. Apparently the park is also important for the endangered southwestern subspecies of the Willow Flycatcher, and the California Condor. Also, what about reptiles in the park? I presume there are rattleysnake type critters (?) Cheers, Casliber (talk · contribs) 13:49, 17 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
I just gave this a quick copyedit/MOS flyover. I left a couple inline comments for you, mav. Maralia (talk) 02:18, 2 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Great edits thanks! I'll take a look at those comments. --mav (talk) 01:59, 3 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- I think I found all of your comments and addressed them. If so, I think we are done with this FAR. --mav (talk) 01:06, 15 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- I tweaked a few more things, and have only one lingering question. You modified this sentence to suit me: "A nearby example of amphitheaters with hoodoos in the same formation but at a higher elevation, is in Cedar Breaks National Monument, which is 25 miles (40 km) to the west on the Markagunt Plateau." The sentence itself parses now, but it is dangling at the end of a paragraph about the weather at Bryce, and I can't figure out why. Grasping at straws - are you trying to make the point that hoodoos form even at higher elevations? Or does the sentence belong somewhere else? Maralia (talk) 02:06, 15 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
FARC commentary
edit- Keep - I'm not sure why this went to FARC b/c I addressed all the citation concerns. If there are any more concerns, I will address those as well. --mav (talk) 23:29, 21 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Keep Adequately cited now; flora and fauna sections expanded per request; and copyedit/MOS cleanup done. Maralia (talk) 02:55, 22 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Keep Mav did a great job in adding citations, no outstanding issues left. hike395 (talk) 04:31, 22 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Keep Good improvement. Cirt (talk) 23:38, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- I think the article is WP:OVERLINKed (common terms known to most English speakers need not be linked), but it's close enough. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 23:19, 1 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Keep Another great job by Mav; I think I got most of the overlinked (common) terms, feel free to de/relink more. Dabomb87 (talk) 00:37, 5 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
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