Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Tunnel Vision (song)/archive2

The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was archived by Ian Rose via FACBot (talk) 05:22, 14 February 2015 (UTC) [1].[reply]

Tunnel Vision (song)

Nominator(s): — Tomíca^(T2ME) 21:54, 19 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

This article is about... a song by American singer Justin Timberlake. Although the song didn't receive a huge commercial impact, its iconic music video sparked controversy after its release. I believe the article satisfies the criteria as its well-written (many thanks to Miniapolis (talk · contribs) for the copy-edit from the last FAC), well sourced and referenced. — Tomíca^(T2ME) 21:54, 19 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Retrohead

"peaked at number 40 on the US Billboard Hot R&B/Hip-Hop Songs chart, and peaked at number eight on the UK R&B Singles Chart"–I think the second "peaked at" could be omitted without losing the meaning of the sentence.
Copy-edited it. — Tomíca^(T2ME) 15:13, 30 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]
premiering on July 3 on Timberlake's Vevo channel–"and premiered" sound more grammatically correct than "premiering" because the premiere is finished action.
Done. — Tomíca^(T2ME) 15:13, 30 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]
The opinions of Kia Macarechi and Justin Myers would read better if separated by semicolon instead of "and".

Done. — Tomíca^(T2ME) 15:13, 30 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

What kind of website is Vulture.com? It's the first time I've noticed it.

Vulture is a blog website part of New York magazine. — Tomíca^(T2ME) 15:13, 30 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I'm little worried about the second sentence of the 'Composition and lyrical interpretation'. It seems to mix facts with opinions, or present opinions as facts ("vacuous" synthesizer or syncopated backbone).

There are just opinions now :). — Tomíca^(T2ME) 15:13, 30 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Also, can you re-title the section 'Composition and lyrics'? Seems easier to understand and keeps its meaning.

Done.— Tomíca^(T2ME) 15:13, 30 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"number 27 and sold 6,670 digital copies"–how about "selling 6,670 digital copies" or "with 6,670 digital copies sold"

Done. — Tomíca^(T2ME) 15:13, 30 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Regarding the live performance, do we know when the song debuted live?

@Retrohead:} Done too. I hope you are satisfied with the other responses too. — Tomíca^(T2ME) 15:13, 30 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Ok, appreciate the swift response. Good luck with the other comments.--Retrohead (talk) 21:55, 30 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Closing comment -- with no commentary for a couple of weeks I'm afraid this nom has stalled so I'll be archiving it shortly. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 05:20, 14 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Closing note: This candidate has been archived, but there may be a delay in bot processing of the close. Please see WP:FAC/ar, and leave the {{featured article candidates}} template in place on the talk page until the bot goes through. Ian Rose (talk) 05:22, 14 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

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